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Voted For: shadow
straight up i wasnt feelin either drop, shadow it was simple...but ok....vocab needs werk, n same with emotion... good points was ya ryhme scheme...which kept my attention focused..overall 6.5/10........ . blah your name,lol...needs more feeling n vocab n try to stay on the topic.. i wasnt feelin anything you wrote,..srrry son, stay up n keep tryin your ryhmin was way off....n so was ya overall readin appeal |
thenks werd eppin
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thank's for the honest vote daz........uppin for some more votes holla
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Voted For: shadow
I putted an note in your locker, saying I was your secret admire I’d emit all my feelings to you in that letter ,also added an flower Your man doesn’t appreciates you, he don’t give you what you desire He treated you like an puppet under his strings, it was like love for hire Seeing you in the beautiful dress, god, You was like an rare diamond Seeing you standing there where I arrange a meeting for you to see my body Your eyes looking at the beautiful sighting, then appeared another human You smiled at him, thinking he did this for you, my anger went to fumes You kissed him. I ran down the road, my tears weeping, with an lost soul I was hoping me and you can be together, all this time it was just an false hope mista-- I think your grammar is horrible... No hate at all, but "putted" "an" before words that start w/ consonants... all that shit adds up, and gets real irritating to have to re-write in my head... I think you had a good path on this topic too, but your writing mis-cues really take alot away from your verse.... Shadow- Not bad at all, I kind of expected a little bit more fluidity to your verse- but the story and rhymes flowed well enough I think to win you this... your verse really reminded me of being a teen-ager for some reason... good shit... Vote shadow. |
This was feedback posted for MiSta_AuTh3nTiQ
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Voted For: shadow
MiSta_AuTh3nTiQ: found good balance in your vocab, structure was nice but your flow was off here and there. Emotion was good because of the personal vibe over it, not that much imagery, you had an "in your face" sort of attitude,saying everything like it was. So imagery and maybe vocab a lil could've been better...Overall good drop... shadow: very deep, had your flow on lock, vocab was tight and structure was good.Emotion was raw and you made me think about some things which is nice of course. Imagery was dope, enjoyed reading this for sure! Very good job! Vote goes to shadow because I was feeling the message a lil more, no hate...RTF please (link is in my sig) |
O damn drama thanks...i never would've thought you vote................
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Voted For: shadow
pretty decent battle here shadow: you practically took this one here mayn, the flow was on point, and not chopped up lookin the vocab was good, and no mispelled words either overall u had a nice story, and stayed on topic MiSta_AuTh3nTiQ:eh you had a pretty decent story here too your flow was on point, and the vocab was good u need a font-change though...but thats me but anyway, u had a good story too, just that to me it wasnt as good as shadow's story tho |
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