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Jay-SmileZ 02-20-05 12:28 AM

feed...
 
i havent even started doing audios yet...but u left feed to mad people soooo....

u sound mad white..very emienemish...flows was really good beat was off the meters...a lot of words sounded repeated...your pronocuation of words was weird...an i wasnt feeling ya voice but it was a solid drop with good flow an delievery.

La Cosa Nostra 02-20-05 08:17 AM

Aiight, sounds like a real underground style. I like your rhyme scheme and your delivery pulls it off well. I think your vocals could be improved but you used some fairly nice techniques.

The track itself was no classic, I think you need to work on having a more definitive style which is the same problem for a lot of underground artists these days. You seem to have your rhyme schemes and delivery down, so nows prime time to start working on your actual style and motivation as a rap artist. You need to think about what your actually trying to achieve or give listeners with your music and plan how your going to hit the industry.

Also think about the beats your using, this beat from ghost face is good, but like most Wutang beats its more or less just loops. Which makes your stuff sound amature or freestyled. Remember your making music and not just throwing words over an instrumental.

I didnt mind this track though; so keep at it man. Goodluck with your rapping.

Also hit up my new track "One Day" in this forum and drop some good feed for me. :)
Peace.

Tha Q 02-20-05 12:27 PM

i love that beat...


voice is nice here...u have more control than the last time I heard you


not bad

vocals could be upped a notch...or the beat lowered


pretty good shit


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Restricted 02-21-05 11:55 AM

Thanks For The Feed...Yea If You D/L The Track and Listen To It In Your Mp3 Player/CD Player....Shit Is Perfectly Leveled Between Vocals and Beat. Soundclick Just Fucks Wit Shit.

Uppin

~R~

Keyz 02-21-05 02:30 PM

This isnt a bad track. Beat is nice the pianos sound crisp. Work on your flow and delivery...and the key message your trying to send, cause like fux i didnt get it niether. I think those 3 improvments will have you doing nice work. Stay up and keep droping, one

Keyz...coming soon..to an audio near you....

TonyTone 02-22-05 07:09 PM

i actually liked the beat, kinda weird tho, the lyrics coulda been better and the flow was decent........seemed like you had a hard time with some of the lines, quality better than my last audio, lol....delivery was ok but spit like you mean it a little bit more
btw, ima get at you for that collab in a bit, i just gotta finish like 2 or 3 more audios first

Restricted 02-28-05 12:19 PM

Aight Fasho Hit Me Up Sumtime..

Appreciate All Feedback.

I'ma Try and Get A New Track Up Here Soon...

~R~

kaveh 02-28-05 08:44 PM

Returnin the Favor

beat is really dope!
voice is coo..sounds kinda loud but its all good
flow and delivery is pretty nice, mic presence is on point
lyrics were hott also!
overall this is a good track man!

Determined 02-28-05 11:21 PM

smooth sick beat..........you remind me of these cats called knife in ya kneck. i think there sight is knifeinyakneck.com, you got that same sick type of style...... "imma kamikaze soldier wit the power of god"................The beat might of needed to change a little. your vocals are on point though. damn, yeh that bitch yelling and shit, you remind me of them, and that rapper Eden. You need to check out both of those artist if you havent already. I kno knife in ya kneck personally so tell them determind said to hit them up, you would do a dope collab. I don't kno Eden, but you sound like him a lil. I give this track a B+

http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=179543
return the favor

~Lady Fiya~ 03-04-05 10:13 PM

aight, i'm really feeling this beat.. ya flow is aight.. it's better than i had heard before.. ya lyrics are pretty good, i like how u tried to ride the beat.. you held good mic presence, i was feeling this tracks and the special effects, the guy screamin at the end.. lol nice shit.. stay up
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