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Voted For: MiSta_AuTh3nTiQ

very very nice battle and good shit from both

emotion- ~Babylon~, mainly because of the ending...the ending was really good, the emotion was ok throughout the whole story but the ending made it stand out a lot i liked it, mista i wasnt feelin any emotion throughout your piece and it looked like you tried to add some in your ending but i didnt like the ending...it didnt feel described good enough and it didnt have a twist as much as babylons but good shit

imagery- Mista, very good imagery there was a lot more shit described that could make you see shit good...babylon i didnt sense a lot just some good emotion and the imagery like "blood gushed out" was good but i felt mista had a lot more no hate

last aspect i feel is the way you told the story and how unique it is, and i feel mista won this aspect, it was more unique he made it like an animal and the descriptiveness of it made it stand out more so he did his thing and the way he told the story was real good, no hate to babylon good luck to both though

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Voted For: ~Babylon~

im gonna have to go with babylon on this joint.
he came wit a more thorough verse and it was easily understood while still being somewhat complex at the same time. basically i liked his flow more and the imagery in there was better in my opinion.
mista authentiq had better vocab in his joint, but there wasnt really much to it, some good lines here n there, but babylon painted a better picture with his verse which gives him the W.
RTF. links in the sig vs Affinity. holla at me...1
both of yall could have used more metaphors tho, it would have created a better tone to go along wit ya topic, nah mean.

Voted For: ~Babylon~

babylon~DAMN, dope topical verse, i like how your words were very descriptive, and the imagery was intense, you had this set-up well, and set the scene with the tone of your words well, which sucked me right in to the story, nice vocabulary, very creative,and the ending was killer, very well done man..1
mista~your vocabulary was good as well, you also set the tone well and the scene with your words, the whole vampire story, which, you carried out well, i thought the ending could have been better, because you did such a good job on setting the story up, good job both of you, but as for creativity and and the surprise factor in babylons story,i must give this to him...dope battle guys..1

Voted For: ~Babylon~

wow, imagery was sick, story line was deffinaTELY killer,
your structure n flow was on point in this piece, best ive seen from you babs, ryhme scheme was good in all parts, the closer got me though, that shit is what a topical is all about, it hit hard, your whole approach followed the topic to a T...
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MISTA, your verse wasnt really that good, ryhme scheme was horrible...full bars constantly didnt ryhme....structure was pretty stretched, it wouldve been ok but you had no inner assonasance ryhmes or basic inners to connect your flow in a good manner...i expected more from you, especially on a topic like this, you didnt set the stage well in the beginning for your drop...better luck next time........
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babs, just overall dope piece n better everything