Voted For: MaRVJay1009

very impresed ofr someone ive never heard of before, i think your an alias, but you still didnt get this one mang

orion.-good:loved the closer, liked the multies too, also had a lot of good punches and werdplay also....but you DO have hard comp.
bad:didnt like the opener, i also fetl like towards the beginning, every OTHER line had a good punch but the foloowing line was just there to rhyme and wasnt really useful...you also had a FEW strecthed lines

marvjay-good:you fail to let me down man, i believe your one of the best on rv, loved teh opening second line, nice opner, good closer too, GODDAMN< this kid is crazy wit the punches and werdplay, that lebron james line and the iv one were astounding, you definitly took it in this category even though your opponent had good ones too...
bad-only thing i think you coodve improved was multies and vocab, but thats bout it

openr-M
closer-O
punches-M
werdplay-M
structure-M
flow-Tie
vocab-O
multies-O

my vote goes to marv
rtf...link in sig

v/marvjay1009

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checkin polls....marv won by the way....werd

Voted For: Orion.

easy. Orion took this one wit harder punches and personals, and better wordplay. this one was onesided to me. I felt like marv didnt even make an attempt to come hard in this one. I think you underrated him. but orion came off wit this one.
marv-i wasnt feelin yo drop homie. no hate, i felt like yo verse lacked good flow and structure to it. I felt like tha punches were all spread too far apart, and that made tha personals sound mediocre. no hate, just elevate urself still
orion. yo drop was nice. i was feelin it more. but i think you lacked structure too, a lil bit of stretched lines, and i wasnt feelin no creativness in this one. but other than that, i felt you took this one.
overall-i gave this one to orion. harder punches,personals.and wordplay/vocab


v/orion


RTF link in sig

Voted For: Orion.

O-Even though you had a little bit of stretched lines, I still think you took this one. You came harder, and more prepared in this one to me. I was feeling you mettaphores esp. in this one. That's where I felt you won this battle at. But you did have a few good personals in there, and a punch or 2.
Marv-Your verse was a lil un-organized to me. I felt like it was done too quick. I was feeling it tho. You came harder wit some decent punches, but your structure took that all off for you. Mettas werent really that good, and I really didnt see too many good personals, but your rhyming were nice. Not too unpredictable.
Overall-I think I'm going to give this one to Orion. I think he came a lil bit harder. His mettaphores did it in this one. Marv, work on the flow of your verse, and you wouldve got my vote, but this one was a close one.

Voted For: Orion.

orion...

based off your humorous remarks......you have my vote. a few of your lines had me rollin' homie (lol). your structure was cool and you used some decent vocab as well. your punches were nice....and your personal worked. i'd like to see what you could do with unlimited line space. lmao at the tool shed line......haha. continue to hold it down.

your funniest lines:

"coming up in nyc? looking for a rep? might as well call me your idol
fag, slut, bitch, cunt......you have the right to all those titles"

and...

"i strike like nazi blitzkrieg, bark rhymes in german while dissectin' this feeble jew
but i refuse to make fun of his spelling- cuz even disslecksikxs arr teople poo"


marv...

just because i voted for rion doesnt mean that i didnt enjoy your verse too. you had some pretty funny lines in there, word. your structure was on point, as well as your punches. i didnt notice any personals in there off-hand, plus your flow was a little off in some parts. keep an eye on those next time homie. overall you did a good job.......but i dont think you got this one. i've seen better from you......so i know that you can come harder next time. keep up the good work pimpin'.

your best lines:

"i hope you got a crew fam, go get wun of your boys to come try me
i dont mean the leaf, if orion live i'll go to the hospital and poison his i-v"

and...

"ur a net mc...u'll be on here by the time im earnin millions
ya cd hot? no you couldnt "put out fire" runnin up in a burnin buildin"

keep on keeping on gentlemen. oner...


...the super...

lmaooo wow oh u wun of dos runnin da strobe niggaz...well half ur votes were unexplained..so they will be taken away

uppin...................................somebody close this...

Voted For: Orion.

that was a good verse I'm glad i stumbled upon it im used to readin shit on this sites cuz thats all a lot of people spit now a days but htis was nice good multies flow structure was off metas was nice pretty funny to

marv you came strong with the goodbar line but after that it just dropped off still a decent verse


v/orion

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checkin pollz...hot battle........................

Voted For: MaRVJay1009

Lmao Marvjay Killed This Foo!He Had Some Decent Punches Every Punch He Had In It Wass Hot As A Matter Of Fact,Marvjay Ya Structure Fell Of At Some Points And You Had Some Mean Ass Wordplay With Multies To Go With It

Orion A Alias And You Know That Verse Wasn't Balanced Right.You Had A Couple Decent Punches Not All Them Was Decent Tho That Idol Lien Was Wack As Hell Man Your Verse Was Stretched,You Didn't Have Any Wordplay And Your Verse Didn't Have A Multies And Didn't Make Sence At Some Points

Openor-Marvjay,Good Punch
Punches,Marjay Had More
Personals-Orion,Had More Personals
Wordplay-Marv
Multies-Marv
Closer-None Marv,Would Of Took It But It Wasn't Worded Right

Overall Marv Took This Rtf

You have no presence... but you're in awe of my charisma…
I'll dispose of every Key you have and treat you like a prisoner…

This shit's a synch I don't flinch, specially in front of this fagget-ass-bitch…
Eh Put ya Money where ya Mouth is, so me-n-my bat can 'Strike Rich'…
Coming up in NYC? Looking For Rep? might as well call me ur idol…
'Fag', 'Slut', 'Bitch', 'Cunt'.... u have the RIGHT to all Those Titles...
tha loser’s circle’s the tool shed, so im putting this hoe in his place…
no skills to embrace, this fag’s a disgrace to the established race…*
I strike like a Nazi blitzkrieg, bark rhymes in German while dissectin' this feeble Jew
But I refuse to make fun of his spelling - cuz evinn disslecksikxs arr teople poo

ya'll think dis kids a crook? naw..cant keystyle gotta get ya book awww
ya lines is "candy" ppl dont reply cuzz u suck they dont "MiSS Da GOOD BaR"
i hope u gota crew fam go get wun of ya boys da come try me
i dont mean da "leaf" if orion live i'll go 2 da hospital & "poison" his "iV"
i aint with games young im grown..ya moms i dont luvin da bone
so now when i call her its "4-HEaD" like da "front of ya dome"
ya bars they weaka..trust me i got thugs dat a pome they heata's
clap at ya legs & leave ya "CaVS" in ya "lebron james sneaker's"
ur a net mc...u'll be on here by da time im earnin millions...
ya cd hott? no u couldn't "PUT OUT FiRE" runnin up in a "burnin buildin"



Marv..you can say goodbye to that vote...i only had 2 stretched lines, and my verse was basically the same line length....2 words...fake vote...

uppin....

^^^lmaooooo dis is no where near an explained vote....so u had about 2 dat weren't explained n i told u dis shit would get opened again

There We Fukkin Go.....

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