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Really nice homie...Very emotional shit...Good imagery, and you did a great job of expressing your thoughts and overall, a good job with this topic...I loved this line the most:
"stuck in a twisted game, and the devil is dealing" ^^Weerd...So true man...Really enjoyed this piece...RTF and hit up my open mic "Lethal Lyricists" and drop a comment or two...1 |
nice drop kess... i liked the diversity of the topic.. had nice emotion.. keep em comin :)
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yeup................................
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the fact that we breathe SHOULD be embraced and i like the way you said that shit.....as a matter of fact i liked the whole deepness of this joint in general.......good shits bro.....and kashmir by led zep is a hot song but whats the name of the one where dude says " sunday morning and we go down to church....see the men folks standing in line, dont say they come to pray to the lord not when my little girl look so fine........and in the evening when the sun is sinkin low and everybodys with the one they love..................i walk the town keep searchin all around......... lookin for my street corner girl"
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^ word to that.
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Word this was a dope peice i was really feeling it...
You had lots of emotions , and good feeling... Nice Imagery , you really made the reader want to keep reading more Nice usuage of wordplay , and vocab, Your structure.. Was good , sorta feel off after the first 4 lines ... You changed up and made shorter lines , thought you could have matched the bars, but it was still a very deep , and dope peice... keep it up |
thanks yo........
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