thanx 4 da feed uppinnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnn

o and heres da link da feed wuz left on
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=188004

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Uppin to the top!!!!!!

ehhhh.... a lot of ya disses were pretty much set up the same way throughout the first 2 verses... last verse was most solid... I agree with dude that said it was kinda basic... if y'all woulda seen each others verses before they were posted ya prolly woulda changed some stuff... me, personally, if i woulda saw my man doing the whole nameplay thing... i woulda just stuck with personals and punches.... got real creative with the facts surrounding the beef... inform the readers what the deal was... like the line that said

I'm something like Shaq and the Lakers cause when I left they aint even make the playoffs.

it was a lil stretched but that's what i'd stick to

ehhhh.... a lot of ya disses were pretty much set up the same way throughout the first 2 verses... last verse was most solid... I agree with dude that said it was kinda basic... if y'all woulda seen each others verses before they were posted ya prolly woulda changed some stuff... me, personally, if i woulda saw my man doing the whole nameplay thing... i woulda just stuck with personals and punches.... got real creative with the facts surrounding the beef... inform the readers what the deal was... like the line that said

I'm something like Shaq and the Lakers cause when I left they aint even make the playoffs.

it was a lil stretched but that's what i'd stick to...ok drop.... coulda been better

Thanxx uppin!!!!!!!!!

sorry for double post...lol..comp actin funny

yo this was aiight...it was the usual delivery I hear...nothin special...but it had a good flow..I enjoyed readin...the vocab was ok, could be better...u know...everything was good y'all should do audio...

my favourite line I saw...

"Tony Green like Baghdad E.F. niggaz I straight bomb'em
Had to stop fucking with E.F. cause I was OneStepBeyond'em"

I like that one...keep it up...by the way return the fav yo...

my peice is called "MY ABC's"

thanx 4 da feed
still uppin dis thread yall
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upiin 4 mo feed on dis hot ass OM yall

A yo Uppin to the top!!!!!!

ok this was not too good of a diss.....you coulda came less played.......ive seen that onestepbeyond line said in the same way just with different approaches.....so thats played.......and the untraceable lines were a lil iffy......kinda plyed but not too much Tstorm came with a wittier personal on me then the other 2 but lyrical's woulda been a lil better if it flowed a lil better...ya structures kinda messed this up for you as well......just be less predictable and try not to have everyone come with some of the same approaches on the personals......but just do ya thing.......and elevate....ya'll just gota go hard or go home cuz ya aint showin much ya skill here.......
no hate just feed :thumbup:

Whatever uppin to the top!