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This was really good TG.....Loved the imagery....lost 4 words

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okay so can i copy these and frame them both in my living room to make them words to live by thanx!

Voted For: Tony Green

great rhymes great flow, good goin wit the topic I liked this shit alot and am hopin to see more of this nigga you really got me feelin it so my vote is for Tony Green

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Voted For: Compose

ight man u got this easy... no offence tonygreen i just felt that compose was deeper..

compose:

ight i liked your verse alot fam... u got a good understanding of the topic and u showed emotion, the flow was good and the vocab was real good, i liked the fact that you split it up into 3 different sections that was dope, i think u went deep into it which is a really good thing coz it made me interested in what u had to write and all i can say really is that it was dope... here is one bar i think stood out from the rest:

This couldnt be a story someone thought was movin...
its not love...its the definition of someone whos inhumane
^^ right there like a deffinition... was dope

you did a good job in this man keep droppin em...


tony green:

i can see you took a different approach to the subject, it was deep but the vocab wasnt good, it got alot better as it got to the end.. the last line is the deeped line which showed alot of emotion man... i liked that you took a different angle to it, usually it works but this time i'm afraid it didnt compose just had a better verse... try to get better understanding of your topics so u can go deeper express your mind and use some good vocab

here is your best line:

And before she drove off to have her night of fun.
I'll never forget she looked back and said I love you son
^^ they the last words? that was real deep man...

overall i liked your verse but it wasnt as deep as composes sorry fam...

rtf! link in the sig pick any of em... pz n no hate keep droppin em

Voted For: Tony Green

I think this was a close ass battle. But I gota go wit Tony Green on this one. I think Tony Green's was more heart hitting and when I read tha topic, that's what i thought about. Compose's drop was more intelligent, but I dont think it was interesting. Yo creativitie was coo, and you hit tha topic like any other expiernced topic battler would have, but I think I;ma hafto go wit Tony because his wasnt predictable. He got my vote basically because he stayed creative and made the topic seem wayy more interesting. Tony gets my vote. But good drop from both.

Nah, I felt Tony's was more deep...but, whatever...uppin this again.

Voted For: Tony Green

Wow

I have to go with Tony Green on this

Really feeling his story much more than Compose's verse. Better vocab, imagery, and more emotion was put into it. I also feel that it went with the topic better. Compose, your verse was weak IMO man, I wasnt feelin it too much. It would've been closer and a better verse from you if it wasnt for your ending. It seems like you just ended it in the middle of the story, and that is a huge no-no

V/ Tony Green

Voted For: Tony Green

neva voted on a topical before but........


both drops were real good....creativity was displayed real Well, nothin bored me at all....tony got tha edge because his was actually a true story....nothin fake which means he experienced it in real life....wordplay was better in compose's drop but overall imma give it to Tony Green

good shit tho @ both niggas...loved this shit, i might start readin topicals lol

return this favor in my battle wit Retro or Souljah good look....

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Voted For: Tony Green

this man is deep....

it was like i was there... had me cryin on the inside.... aww man... im all teary

and compose didnt have good descriptions

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Voted For: Compose

Topical battles usually get mad boring to me, but this actually interested.. Here's what I got out of it..

Tony Green
I didn't necessarily like the way you went about the topic, but you made it work. You used decent imagery, but good emotion to keep the reader interested. It may have been more interesting with some more inner rhyming or something like that, that just keeps your eyes glued, but regardless, it was still fairly easy to follow what you were saying. I also thought that your rhyme scheme could have been better. You forced a few rhymes throughout your peice which took away from the imagery that you were trying to display because it was almost like I was focusing more on the lack of rhyme then where you were trying to take my thoughts. But, regardless, you still kept good emotion, but the imagery and rhyme scheme probably should have been improved.

Compose
What I liked about your style is that you didn't try to force inner rhyming in. You still had some, but I found it more interesting that you were using wordplay throughout your peice. That kept my interested in reading by itself. I thought the way you went about the topic was pretty creative, but you executed it nicely. Your imagery was consistently good throughout the peice, as was the emotion. The part I liked most was the end, though. The way you tied everything together was dope. Overall, just a good job.

Overall
I like creativity.. which is why I liked the way Compose went about going through his topic more. However, both of them were executed pretty nicely. Compose also had better imagery throughout the peice, but the emotional aspect was pretty close to even. This came down to who's I was more interested in and the combination of wordplay, inner rhyming, imagery, emotion, and creativity bought it for me. My vote goes to Compose.

Vote - Compose

Hit up the link in my sig please.

Oh, and Tony, I know that we "beefed" back in the day, but seriously.. that had nothing to do with my vote. I dropped that shit a while back and even if you haven't, I don't bring shit like that to Front Lines.

Voted For: Compose

meh, i was definately feeling compose's more

tony: you had a touching story man...but complexity and enjoyment just weren't there....i feel if you came at this with greater vocab, to create more imagery and enhanced emotion...you could have ended with a real good story, and possibly the win....but i feel you lacked a whole bunch, except for the fact that this was a true story...you managed to express it well....but just because it was true, doesn't mean its an automatic win; theres more to it than that....keep up, elevate

compose: uh, it was different, lol....but you told a vivid story, vocab really brought out the imagery/storyline....decent emotion, i think if you completed thoughts a little more, it woulda been better....sentences seemed a little short.........i think what sealed this for you, were your last 4 lines; serioulsy, they were awesome, nice flow, well thoughtout, solid message: overall, great way to end a nice piece

i think you were the better competitor in this one, props to ya both, keep up

v/compose...rtf.

Voted For: Compose

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