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soooooooo many users that cant vote... what a waste lmfao BUMP

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This was feedback posted for Mr. Hahn
 

checkin-ness........................................

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Voted For: Stanza

Stanza You Got Lucky That Han Lacked A Storyline...

Aiight Its Like This...
Stanza Had Consistant Flow, Good Emotion And Imagry...
Also What Won This For Him Was The Storyline...
Han Completely Lacked Something To Fallow Along With...
And Althought It Had Amazing Vocab, Imagry And Flow Was Straight...
You've GOT To Have A Storyline, Its A Topical...
That Is The Point Of Topical Writing...
Pretty Good Battle Though...

Han Just Work On Your Storylines And Concepts...
Then You Could Be Great...
.One.

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Thanx Mayne
We Still Uppin

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Voted For: Stanza

Creativity - This was close but Stanza
Flow - Hahn
On topic - Stanza (just)
Enjoyment - Both
Illest concept/Line - Stanza :
well Becuase I Made it Out of This Mentally Sane
Becuase Nothing Can Bring More Pain Than Summer Rain

dope dope dope

overall - ILL READ! well it was good anyway lol appreciated but vote - stanza v.hard to decide catagories were so close in choosing
Stay up

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Voted For: Stanza

Aight Its Like This..

Stanza:

Simlpe Vocabulary Here, and When I First Started Reading Mr. Hahns I Was Like DamN His Vocab Sick, but Then I Looked Deeply and His Shit Was Overworded and Didn't Make Sense. Your Piece Had A Sort-of Poetic Justice Feel To It Which I Like. Not My Topic of Choice LoL, but Ya'll Did Ya Thing.

Mr. Hahn:
Man, You Tried To Put All That Vocab In, but When You Do That You Have To Make Sure Its Not Overclouding and That It Makes Sense. With Sucha Simple Topic As This, You Went Way Beyond What You Should've. This Took Away From The Read and Feel of Your Topic.

Vote - Stanza For Better Overall Topical Verse.

~R~