Voted For: Jae .StyleZ.

J.Stylz got this easy win.........................

This was feedback posted for DA RIPPA
 

now now now

yo.
I took yo mama.i took her to heaven.
and when i got done

i told her to go back to seven 11

i did yo mama
aint her name sondra

i woulda been yo daddy
but i used a condom

I ll end this real quick
by sayin my thumb
is way bigger dan yo dick

son look at yo outfit
did you try to match it
it look like you got yo but beat
by an easter basket

This was feedback posted for Jae .StyleZ.
 

flow-jae
punches-jae
structure-jae
personals-tie
vocab-tie
wordplay-rippa
open

fuck my computer fucked up so ill finish it

open-jae
finish-jae

vote-jae stylez

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Voted For: DA RIPPA

Jae .StyleZ.
lyrically I'm popping techs so read my words an feel what i texted
cuz like Drunk Driverin Campers I'll leave D(thee) R. V. Wrecked..
(R.V. the site an is like a mobile home)
^not a good opener nor diss....forced the rhyme 1/10^
This Skills magic,Ur toned low next to a Ringer
Jae Tighter, He'll get "D - Ciphered" like homosexual Swingers
^self glor. no diss......0/10^
THis Is my lyrical mind at work givin u lyrical fines...
CAuse im quick to cross out "D's" Like NO Dumping Signs....
^no........0/10^
OVERALL:Your verse was lacking hard punches...you had 6 lines 4 of nothing.....but weak punches and 2 of self glor. that did absolute nothing for you. I sugest you up on your punches....and personals and make them directed to your opponent and hit hard....elevation is needed

Da Rippa
*yo you couldn't spit shit, if your head was up fat basterd ass*
*when you fuck a bitch, it's like going deepsea diving for crabs* bar 1
^good word play, kinda weak diss but still hit 4/10^
*i'll take ya "style flows", eat it, digest it, shit it out on ya dome*
*have you crying to ya moma "he won't leave me alone"* bar 2
^Bad structure...bad flow....but still had a diss against your oponent 3/10^
*i would end this verse telling you to kiss ya mama "for me"*
but i can't cause ya mama mouth is "on me"* bar 3
^Those lines are played, gutta make it creative if you use it 3/10^
OVERALL:You had a better verse than your opponent....some lines was played but you actually had a couple punches that hit.....so not as bad....up on your overall punches and personals...

V/DA RIPPA

RTF ON MY BATTLE IN MY SIG HONEST VOTE*

^^^ wow ....Noob.......upppinnnnn..................

Voted For: Jae .StyleZ.

da rippa

*yo you couldn't spit shit, if your head was up fat basterd ass*
*when you fuck a bitch, it's like going deepsea diving for crabs*
6/10 KINDA WACK BUT ITS OKAY

*i'll take ya "style flows", eat it, digest it, shit it out on ya dome*
*have you crying to ya moma "he won't leave me alone"*
5/10 2ND LINE KILLED IT. SO LOW SCORE

i would end this verse telling you to kiss ya mama "for me"*
but i can't cause ya mama mouth is "on me"
4/10 BY FAR THE WORST LINE IN UR VERSE

OVERRAL U GOT A 15/30 ALL I GOT 2 SAY IS ELEVATE

Jae .StyleZ.

lyrically I'm popping techs so read my words an feel what i texted
cuz like Drunk Driverin Campers I'll leave D(thee) R. V. Wrecked..
4/10 WACK

This Skills magic,Ur toned low next to a Ringer
Jae Tighter, He'll get "D - Ciphered" like homosexual Swingers
5/10 HOMO LINES ARE PLAYED.

THis Is my lyrical mind at work givin u lyrical fines...
CAuse im quick to cross out "D's" Like NO Dumping Signs....
8/10 THIS LINE IS THE BEST IN THE WHOLE BATTLE ACUTALLY MADE ME LAUGH
OVERALLY 17/30 NOT BAD BUT STILL NEED 2 ELEVATE

V/JAE STYLEZ

Voted For: Jae .StyleZ.

lyrically I'm popping techs so read my words an feel what i texted
cuz like Drunk Driverin Campers I'll leave D(thee) R. V. Wrecked..
4...I see the "D" connection and all..but didn't really diss well
(R.V. the site an is like a mobile home)
This Skills magic,Ur toned low next to a Ringer
Jae Tighter, He'll get "D - Ciphered" like homosexual Swingers
3...ur not really dissin...you got some ite wordplay and all...but ..
THis Is my lyrical mind at work givin u lyrical fines...
CAuse im quick to cross out "D's" Like NO Dumping Signs....
6...finnally a diss...set-up should be chanhed tho..but good punch

*yo you couldn't spit shit, if your head was up fat basterd ass*
*when you fuck a bitch, it's like going deepsea diving for crabs* bar 1
1....this was dumb.....
*i'll take ya "style flows", eat it, digest it, shit it out on ya dome*
*have you crying to ya moma "he won't leave me alone"* bar 2
4....had a little trace of sumtin in 1st line..but the punch was shit..
*i would end this verse telling you to kiss ya mama "for me"*
but i can't cause ya mama mouth is "on me"* bar 3
1.....do you know how played moma jokes are?

OK..Jae Stylez got this

Da rippa.U need to work on almost everything.Stop with the stars at the begginin and end of lines.Fucks the structure up.And get some better concepts.Look at that 3rd bar..moma on me?..That's played as fuck.Anything with mama in it is played.ELEVATE.

Vote-Jae
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Voted For: Jae .StyleZ.

yo im given it to Jae cuz i liked hiz punches and they were direct and hard...both had nice verses but Jae had the better one...structure could use a little work Jae but u had a better verse...holla at shya boy