uppin...I actually looked at dis... .

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Voted For: Stanza

im "rippin text","tearin out ya words" when my punches is hittin ya head
"dismember your rhyme scheme" and "killin ya stanza" when im fillin da lead
da only way u could "step all over my rhymes",is if I "spit on da sidewalk"
I bring da "vengeance to ya livin room",that means u gonna "die hard"
look kid ur "bars is improperly written" so u need ta "change ya name"(stanza)
Im stayin wit "flames",only way to stop my bars was if u came wit "reign"
I "drive thru" dis fag like fast food,he couldn't stop me if he was a "red light"
I bet he "shines" in battle like a "deer crossin da road" in da "head lights"(lol)
please u must be "kiddin",cuz u "scared of me" like I was "michael jackson"
only chance of you winnin dis is if u flipped ur win percentage to "likable fractions"
kid im the main feature,u just da "sideline attraction" like a "cheerleader"
I bet his parents kicked him out as worthless,and RV...doesnt like him here neither

Yo Da Verse Wuz Iight, Culd Ov Came Harder Wit Sum Concepts Ov Yo Punchez, Wordplay Wuz Off In Alot Ov Ypo Rhymez 2, Personalz Wuz There, But U Culd Ov Hit Harder Wid Da Wordplay & Ur Vocab Could Use A Lil Touchin Up 2....Not Bad Yo, But U Need 2 Be Mo Creative...Therez Npo Limit 2 Wordplay Dawg, Let Yo Mind Take Over, U Feel?


Ima Speed up This Dude Heart Rate Like Old Ppl Having Sex
He Wishin Viagra could Help Now But all he got is Spandex
Yo Your Not On My Level Son ...Lets compare The Records
I'll Tear Your verse Apart & Take The S Outta Ya Sketchers
So You Not Throwin Punchez at me Son You Jus A Ketcher
I Felt Like Hitler When I Toke Down This German Shepard
You Might Wanna Duck Jus Look What My Rymes is Holdin
U Aint Been on Da Grind Since T.Hawks Pro Skateboarding [b]
See [b]I Make You & Break You So I Live Up to Yo Avy
Last Time U Found Dirt, Was When U Was Pickin Daisies
See Now that Ive Done Ten Lines Its Only Fair To Stop Here
Bcuz When I Spit This Dude Head will Feel Lopsided
................ As If He were Hearing Out Of One ear

Dope Rhymez, Punz Wuz Creative & Witty, U Maybe Culd Word Yo Verses Better So Da Flow Az U Read Iz Ez'er 2 Follow, But Still Decent, Not Az Played Az Adrenaline, More Creative & Harder Hittin Wod Da Punz, Wordplay Iz Da Key, Sum Linez U Had It, Sum Didnt, Work On Being Mo Consistant

Vote=Stanza+He Had Better Wordplay, Punz & Adrenaline Wuz A Lil Played Wit A Few Linez & Self Gloried A Lil 2

Return Da Vote In Mah Signature Plz

Aii Man Ill RTF ASAP ........................................bump

Now Wuld Be A Good Tyme Dawg, Wuldnt Want Mah Vote In Here Removed Wuld'cha?

Juz Messin Wit'chu Dawgy, But Holler@DaSignaturePlz, Linxxxxxxxx In Thurr 4ya

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This was feedback posted for Adrenaline
 

i like the way adrenaline comes at him. both verses werent bad though.

Voted For: Stanza

V/stanza...this was an ight battle....because stanza came wit the punchs that were used creatively wit good wordplay....an structure...adren....u came wit an ight verse nuthin to special....u had stretched lines an some ur punchs played mike jackson lines are a no....played work on those things....No Hate.....RETURN THE FAVOR...
(Or U'll Never recieve an honest vote from me agian an i'll get this removed)
Opener=S
CLoser=S
Structure=S
Punchs=S
Personals=s
Wordplay=S
Multi's=None really
Vocab=S
Overall=Stanza

Thanx Young Blaze

Ill RTF If you give me some links .................

Voted For: Adrenaline

because sick rhymes on the right lines at the right times

Vote disqualified for inadequate feedback. Please see this thread if you need help on what qualifies as an acceptable explanation.

http://community.rapverse.com/showb...ad.php?t=193594
Link........Honest vote homie.....

Gotcha Homez

,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,Still Uppin I Beleave

Voted For: Stanza

i will go with stanza here.

adrenaline: meh, nothing special, elevate everything. too basic, and thats what really hurt you. all your concepts have been done before, and the stuff that was not, was just straight whack. nothing else to really say, elevate in punches.

stanza: well, you came harder and had a couple that connected/effective. your closer however, was super whack and should never have a set-up like that, plus it was self-glore, so avoid that in the future; also, your stuff was kind of on the weak side as well, but you did stay consistent, and had a couple punches that hit, so you get my vote

v/stanza. rtf on the link in my sig, or this gets taken away :).

Yo Stanza I Already Voted On Diz Battle Dawg So Watz Up