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This was feedback posted for mizz fyre
 

yeh fam, you dropped solid in this..really felt your imagery and emotion...

Good looking ma!

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Voted For: mizz fyre

Not a bad topical battle ok ima break this down

Ghost...nice 1st attempt the topic was there it just aimed direction in my opinion flow was good a lil stretched the wording and style was good but i think a stronger story was needed really you were jus sayin stuff that was on topic but there was hardly any imagery or depth into you topical also closer didn't rhyme which hindered the verse but all in all it was a good piece and you'll get better as you go on.

Mizz Fyre...your verse this time round i was feelin it had a story to it and kept a vivid imagery to it...a mothers story a very nice way to go off such an interesting topic the flow and structure was very easy to read and decently laid out this IMO was the winning verse i could picture a mother sitting on a bench talkin to her baby and i liked that.

v/Mizz Fyre...RTF on my battle (vs accomplish) within 3 days or vote removed :thumbup:

Voted For: mizz fyre

Yo Tite Topical Here Frum All Yall

Mizz Fyre U Came Wid Alot Of Deep Emotional ''Words Of Wizdom'' Dat Wuld Be Pecise 2 Yo GrandKidz Inna Few Years :thumbup: But Yo, Alot Ov Creativity Frum Both Here, Both Yall Wuz On Poiint Wiv Da Schemez Ov Da Topicz, Complex Concepts Frum Ghost, But Da Vocan & Emotion Wuz Lackin, & Dat Wuz Mizz Fyre Had, Yall Both Came Creative Wid It, But Mizz Fyres Deep Creative Scheme Getz Her Mah Vote

Holla@Da Link Below Plz, Drop A Vote, Da Battle Iz Whack, It Wuz Mah First Battle, But All Da Mo Reazon 2 Get It Closed!
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Voted For: mizz fyre

Mizz fyre- Uh ok. You had great imaginary. the flow of it was some-what poetic. The emotion you had in this verse was average, i say put more feelings to it. The concept you approach in this verse was good. I just say put more feelings to it, nice imaginary though.

Ghost- alright, ok for a first topical. The best aspect from your verse was imaginary, but the imaginary wasn't great nor weak just average. I didnt feel no emotion from your verse, nah nothing. You need to upp on your vocab (you too mizz fyre), but it was ok for a first, just need to work on imaginary and emotion.


Overall=This was kinda like an one-sided battle, I'mma have to vote on mizz fyre because she came good with a nice approach. Her imaginary and emotion just won it in this battle. Ghost your verse was ok for a first but it didnt have that "better" imaginary, your emotion is what's lacking in your topical verse, so i vote for mizz fyre for better imaginary and emotion (elevate on that part)............1

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