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Voted For: Paranoid

hmmm this wasn't the best.. but an okay battle.

mizz fyre: verse was okay. but like.. iono.. just wasn't really feeling it.. like espeically in ur first 2 lines.. like the flow to me really seemed sorta off.. and flow is important so the reader can image ur lyrics n understand it without being paused by the lack of flow.. also your vocab didn't seem to be good enough.. vocab is important because it can explain more with one word.. and make better imagery n emotion.. overall.. pretty nice verse...


paranoid.. your flow as well isnt perfect.. but still sort of off.. iono y but maybe now for rv heads its hard to have a nice flow.. well neway.. your vocab was very much on point.. n explained more and really had a much better story line.. your sorta got the emotion.. but you didn't provide enough imagery.. that too is important.. well just because you had better vocab and a better story line..

i vote: Para

Alright thanx Uppin for some more votes..................

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yo fyre if its cool can i get this closed?

Voted For: mizz fyre

Both did wonderful verses both had creative words and a good use in vocabulary everythin both competitors had but the person i thought that had more sense in this was mizz fyre good job to both but mizz fyre had the better verse better word structure as well dont get me wrong it was hard to decide but i just thoguht mizz was better so my v/ goes to fyre

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^^^thanx very much and no paranoid.......don't close it

Uppin this for my boi Paranoid..........................bump

still upppppppppppppppin this.............................

his votes getting dqed and thanks for the upps im back for 2 nights.

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Voted For: Paranoid


Both yall was kinda eh with your drops

Fyre....you had a good storyline but ya whole style of writing is so basic....no metaphors...imagery was fair not great somewhat forced in spots....vocab was real basic, however flow & structure was good...basically u had a good drop that lacked complexity....that same drop with upped vocab an some nice metas would own alot of people.

Para....u was almost identical in ya astyle of drop jus I found ya story a lil more enjoyable, ya flow & structure was on point coulda used some multies....imagery was decent jus a tad better than fyre....reall if she had alil more complexity she woulda smashed you....u had a good drop but fyre beat herself in this one

Vote: Para