more poetryish yes

but some nicely thought of rhymes....cool story within this
lyrics were good
flows ight

overall i enjoyed the read...stay real

tnx yeaaaaaaaaa ma first 2 page post llol tnx

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Yo this was hot for real. Its like it put us in the guys shoes giving us an insight into the person's train of thought.
And i was feeling the vocab in this piece.it was decent without getting to the point of tryna be a smartass or nothin.

You got talent right there. keep it up.

yo that shyt was genius . keep it comen ma ......im looken forward to hearen from you

tnx...... truly appriciated ~1~

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damn ma u wrote sum deep shit, good imagery, multi'z, & keep writing i like it

tnx yall.........for realll,,, truly appriciate it........ yall keep doin ur thing 2 ~1~