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ight umm this was a weak battle in my eyes but imma break it down....

mad rapper:

Even with a style of speech you couldn’t smile and reach
People like preachers do just a creature to ugly to rap best I teach
^^ ok line weak punch though
Your brains and impeach your mainframe, your voice seem to squeak
And your scheme is weak which tells me you don’t have a team freak.
^^ not feeling this at all
Even with the help of Abraham Lincoln you couldn’t have a plan
To rock a nation like the emancipation of Proclamation done do you understand?
^^ nop again man

i wasn't feeling your verse at all really.. u need to think of punches coz the ones u are throwing now are weak real weak... so think of ceoncepts and word them good andf then you'll be on your way...

inter:

When I spit, I cum hard, like I have verbal intercourse
I fucked your brain up and showed absoloutly no remorse
^^ ok line not really hard hitting
You spit multis and similes like they are verbal diarrhea
Cause your shit stank even before it hit my ear
^^ not feeling this at all sorry man
Kid, you spit wack scripts you get *divided* like mathematics your verbal tactics are weak its only good fur the LACTOSE-INTORLENT
MADD you end up in willy wonaks factory cos u get broke down like cocaine and just remain as a GALACTOSE-OCCUPENT
^^ lmao talk about stretched it was ok just alor stretched
Yo Madrapper is whack so when JRoy gave feed Madrapper had to diss him
This nigga needs to change his name to badrapper cos this another quick win
^^ lol umm ok personals not really feeling the last line

ight man u have some elevating to do in the punches and structure aspect they are better than mad's but the are still weak... hit up teph and see how u can improve on punches all u need to do for your structure is match upo your syllable count from 12-15 syllabls in 1 line...

ight

v/inter he had better punches and a better all around verse pz

hey let me tell yall cats my punchlines are brand new the average cat will never ever think of these punchlines how can they be weak when you can't even think of punchlines like this you can say as you please i won this on mere creactivity WHY YALL LOVE THAT OLD PLAYED OUT SHIT? HE DIDN'T WIN THIS HE'S THINKING TOO SIMPLE HA! HA! HA!

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Intermental

When I spit, I cum hard, like I have verbal intercourse
I fucked your brain up and showed absoloutly no remorse
^okay opener, no punch though

You spit multis and similes like they are verbal diarrhea
Cause your shit stank even before it hit my ear
^lolz likin this

Kid, you spit wack scripts you get *divided* like mathematics your verbal tactics are weak its only good fur the LACTOSE-INTORLENT
MADD you end up in willy wonaks factory cos u get broke down like cocaine and just remain as a GALACTOSE-OCCUPENT
^dayummmmmm, hot bar right here! Got everyting in it, wordplay, multi, personal, punch...Whoa...

Yo Madrapper is whack so when JRoy gave feed Madrapper had to diss him
This nigga needs to change his name to badrapper cos this another quick win
^good closer

That one bar just killed it fo real, others were kinda basic and nothing special but then BAM....bold one...structure was cool, flow was aight, vocab okay and punches/personals were there

MADDRAPPER[/b]

Even with a style of speech you couldn’t smile and reach
People like preachers do just a creature to ugly to rap best I teach
^not really feelin opener but aight

Your brains and impeach your mainframe, your voice seem to squeak
And your scheme is weak which tells me you don’t have a team freak.
^cool bar, nice punch

Even with the help of Abraham Lincoln you couldn’t have a plan
To rock a nation like the emancipation of Proclamation done do you understand?
^coo closer

Aight, solid verse right here, had some punches, no real personals though, flow was excellent as well as structure and vocab but I feel it couldn't compete with that one bar from Intermental, no hate man