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GKillaz05 06-24-05 03:39 PM

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Livin' Legend 06-24-05 03:51 PM

Voted For: Smoove

smoove took this one...and heres tha breakdown:


You’re the worst GK.. but face it.. your text is dormant
& when GK hits the pad.. he uses extra absorbent
this was an ight opener. i didnt like how you used his name once in each line. you only needed it once in tha whole bar, but its coo. but tha second line is what made this a good bar. that was creative, and a funny diss. not exactly a personal, but a good diss.

Stay pounding you w/ these punches.. & I’ll crack the mold
But your verse has more dots n’ dashes..
..than Morse codes
this was some more funny, clever shit. this was a really good bar

In text your weak.. plus.. your punches amount to shit
GK soils his pants.. he added water & created a rain forest
it seemed like u forced this bar to be in ur verse, but its coo. didnt really hurt you, it was still nice


You kind of remind me of Jay-Z – out there wrecking the sales
Also.. minus the flow, album hype, plus everything else
on tha first line, i was like ight. "its coo, but nothing big..." , then tha second line, i was hella weak. that was some funny, unplayed shit. you threw me for a loop on that one, wasnt expectin it.


Your not a very good employee.. so I’m about to give you the boot
& your sitting at your computer.. surfing the net.. wearing a wet-suit
this was just ight wordplay. tha end of this bar is was made it ight. couldve been better[

overall, i think this verse was about a 7.5/10. about 2 bars couldve been reworded better, and had a lil more thought into em, but they were still coo. i was feelin this verse. yo disses were on point, and so was ur flow, and you punches. you came real hard on this one, and i think you took tha battle.


gkillaz05 verse:

Your so whack, you might as well check-in and not spit...
I'll set your toilet on fire, just so you got hot shit...
this was an ight opener, but toilet lines are played

Your winnin' streak ima stop it, Kid get ready to lose...
fuck kinda name is Smoove?.. musta been drinkin' booze...
this bar was wack. just because it rhymes dont mean is a punch or a good diss. put some more thought in to it.

All your lyrics hear is boo's.. like there were ghosts...
Wanted 2 prewrite his verse so he ignored all my posts...
i could see u tried at a personal here, but you just fell short. it was wayy to simple. shouldve put more thought into it.

Your raps are burnt like toast, no one whould bite it...
Wouldnt be surprised if you got your mother to write it...
fuck readin tha rest...all you gota do is look at tha end of your lines, and see that this shit is simple. your rhyming is too simple, and your barz arent making any sense, they just rhyme, but have no meaning to em

Gettin' all excited like a dog, about to piss yourself...
Rhymes are retarded... when you spit you diss yourself...
first line was an attempt at a descent closer, but then you messed it up, and came wit tha stupid bar. which made no sense, and had no meaning to it.

overall, i felt ur verse was wayy too simple to take this win. i felt you came off wayy too soft. you shouldve put more thought into a lot of bars. some of em were unneccessary bars. i think you should really elevate urself., but a descent try.

[b]so, i think smoove took this one, because he showed more consistentcy, and he came off a lil stronger wit tha punches and wordplay.



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GKillaz05 06-25-05 06:25 PM

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PrahJect 06-25-05 08:18 PM

Voted For: GKillaz05

Haha let me sum it up then Im gonna break it down:

GKilla got this one for me, structure on point, rhymes cracked me up...Smoove alrite punches didnt hit hard enuf.... lets break it down:

smoove:


You’re the worst GK.. but face it.. your text is dormant
& when GK hits the pad.. he uses extra absorbent
^^^
Good opener, good punch, decent hit.....3/5

Stay pounding you w/ these punches.. & I’ll crack the mold
But your verse has more dots n’ dashes..
..than Morse codes
^^
I see what ure sayin but its not really a diss rite...1/5

In text your weak.. plus.. your punches amount to shit
GK soils his pants.. he added water & created a rain forest

^^
Aiite got me a laughin a bit..4/5

You kind of remind me of Jay-Z – out there wrecking the sales
Also.. minus the flow, album hype, plus everything else
^^^
ahaha....GOOD...best u dun 4/5

Your not a very good employee.. so I’m about to give you the boot
& your sitting at your computer.. surfing the net.. wearing a wet-suit

^^
NO....didnt feel that...1/5

Your so whack, you might as well check-in and not spit...
I'll set your toilet on fire, just so you got hot shit...

^^^^^
sick opener HAHA...great start...4/5

Your winnin' streak ima stop it, Kid get ready to lose...
fuck kinda name is Smoove?.. musta been drinkin' booze...
^^
Sorry not feelin this..1/5..think its a played concept

All your lyrics hear is boo's.. like there were ghosts...
Wanted 2 prewrite his verse so he ignored all my posts...
^^
Aiite punch but didnt hit too hard...3/5

Your raps are burnt like toast, no one whould bite it...
Wouldnt be surprised if you got your mother to write it...
^^^
HAHA.....another cracker...good shit...4/5

Gettin' all excited like a dog, about to piss yourself...
Rhymes are retarded... when you spit you diss yourself...
^^^^^
BEST LINE......5/5.....hot shit man....well done Gkilla

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GKillaz05 06-25-05 10:59 PM

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GKillaz05 06-27-05 03:42 PM

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GKillaz05 06-27-05 11:59 PM

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GKillaz05 06-28-05 05:23 AM

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J. Dubya 06-28-05 05:11 PM

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WhoAmI 06-28-05 08:08 PM

Voted For: Smoove

ok this was a decent battle. it was fulla humour n shit which i thought was aite still. but there can only be one winner
don't get it twisted there were some real shit punches and basic rhymes in both verses, but i thought that Smoove had this one. even though GK's closing line was the funniest in the whole battle, Smooves punches were hittin harder and a lot more frequently.
structure was a bit off and GK had an easier structure and flow to follow, but you still won this.

GK you really need to think of better punches than that cos some of them were really played for real.

Smoove gets this one

no hate ~peace~

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criminal 06-29-05 12:46 PM

Voted For: GKillaz05

You’re the worst GK.. but face it.. your text is dormant
& when GK hits the pad.. he uses extra absorbent
decent start

Stay pounding you w/ these punches.. & I’ll crack the mold
But your verse has more dots n’ dashes..
..than Morse codes
herd that befor hope it aint BIT played concept

In text your weak.. plus.. your punches amount to shit
GK soils his pants.. he added water & created a rain forest
WTF?? WEAK... N dumb.. *no hate*

You kind of remind me of Jay-Z – out there wrecking the sales
Also.. minus the flow, album hype, plus everything else
aight..

Your not a very good employee.. so I’m about to give you the boot
& your sitting at your computer.. surfing the net.. wearing a wet-suit
ha funny ending...

u had a good punch a couple of aight bars noting really stood out besides ya last bar, vocab average multis none, diss aight....

u did aight 7/10



Your so whack, you might as well check-in and not spit...
I'll set your toilet on fire, just so you got hot shit...
better start decent...

Your winnin' streak ima stop it, Kid get ready to lose...
fuck kinda name is Smoove?.. musta been drinkin' booze...
aight just flowin...

All your lyrics hear is boo's.. like there were ghosts...
Wanted 2 prewrite his verse so he ignored all my posts...
decent...

Your raps are burnt like toast, no one whould bite it...
Wouldnt be surprised if you got your mother to write it...
aight

Gettin' all excited like a dog, about to piss yourself...
Rhymes are retarded... when you spit you diss yourself...
decent ending could of been better

u stood more consistent but punches could of been harder ya flow was better, multis sorda, but u still stood more consistent thats why i voted for u

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GKillaz05 06-30-05 03:07 AM

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MC Virtuoso 06-30-05 03:46 AM

This was feedback posted for Smoove
 
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BiZzO 06-30-05 03:47 AM

Voted For: GKillaz05

ok this was an aiight battle...props to both you on this...

Gkilla - your verse was solid, punches hit hard, the verse flowed pretty well from begining to end, neither of you really had any personals, G your wordplay was pretty gud, your structure was solid, and you just need to upp on your vocabulary a bit more...
overall gud verse - solid...

M.C - your verse was iight, flow was gud at the start but then sortof desintigrated as it closed, again, neither really had any personals, your punches hit, wordplay wasnt as good as killaz but it was ok, you need to upp also on your vacabulary, structure was gud.. overall - playin safe.

vote/ Gkillaz05

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GKillaz05 06-30-05 12:58 PM

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