Voted For: SmotMan

This my first battle, and no I ain’t no KOOL COL-B, but li’l Will M. ain’t shit to me
I’ma throw it down quick, I’ma make his shit sick, slice off his balls and cut off his dick
^^nice flow....but where's the punch??
So here the shit goes, please hold ya nose, ‘cause I’m gon’ raise quite the stink,
Make him so uncool you gon’ think that fool is a muthapukkin’ cockfag-dink
^^"Make him uncool???,cock-fag dink??"...what the hell
He’s the douche-born son of a coupla’ skanks, they were chuggin’ the beer and sniffin’ the crank
They made sweet incest love and when they were done, nine months later out popped William
^^^what the hell.....throw a punchline
This might leave a bruise, but he’s fit to lose, he ain’t got nothin’ on me, so let it be known, he’s about to be ovathrown, ‘cause I’m the shit like KOOL COL-B
^^suks

I ain't gon bother breakin it down anymore.Your shit was shack.Flow was excellent.....but u had zero punchlines.Structure ur verses better....it was fuckin ugly. and it just made it harder to read.


They call him anal alex cuz hes tha biggest fag ull ever meet
He likes gettin wacked off with fat chick’s feet.
^^Flow suked....wat wrong wit the name alex?
Alex likes his men nice and strong,
So they can butt fuck like donkeykong.
^^wat buttfuick is there in DK?
His tiny dick makes them chicks laugh and stare
The only action he’ll ever get is playing with his pubic hair.
^^how is it action when it's pubic hair?
Alex likes cock, he’ll even suck it for free
If he had tha chance he’d prolly suck off KOOL COL-B.
^^My godness.............
Run if you hear him pass
Because in a second he’ll have your pants down and be fucking yo ass.
^^1st line so short...2nd. so long
Smotman cant handle this bitch,
He can suck my balls and eat my shit
^^shut up

After readin the other guy;s verse.....I knew,for you to lose.....you had to post some garbage.And you suceeded.Ur shit was the worst verse I seen.U wanna know wat wrong wit it?....read it.

Vote-Smotman(vote in link below or vote dq'd)
http://community.rapverse.com/showb...97&page=2&pp=15

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took tha werds right outta my mouth, uppin, werd

Voted For: SmotMan

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