This was feedback posted for Godz Angel
 

This was feedback posted for NaRc-UzI
 

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nice drop fam, you should have this wrapped up for real..

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Voted For: NaRc-UzI


I will start like the ladies in the breast cancer marathon,
Time to bust a sweat on your ass, like in a triatholon.
^^whack and weak...not a punch
Your like an iron you steam away your ideas through stress,
Not again, You let the big girl balloon tittys get to ya head.
^^weak
But dont worry I aint dead, but ill be there to make sure you locked.
Your like your mother, dontstop my name tatooed on the cock.
^^^weak again...c'mon
Pictures of me hung to drop, im the one who spoiled your crop,
You make as much sense as a victoria secret magazine cover,
^^^victoria secret cover not makin sense?
But I dont see nuthing but a thong you and your little brother.
I dont even have a gun yet i still pistol wip your ass,
^^^How u gon pistol whip him without a gun?
You can smell the fear when i walk in the room with a beer to pass,
Take a sip and lie on the ground like wood taking your last gasp,
^^not a punch
You are shit to me, im done with this faggot, My turn is passed.
^^gon finish that bar?

Ur verse was below mediocre.There were bars in there that were not a punch.Every bar gotta be a ounch.Then you started talkin garbage like you gon pistol whip without a gun.

If "angel" overdosed on "zantex" his "bars" still wouldnt be "ill"
He be looking "close" at my "text" saying that nigga "narc" got "skills"
^^nah...........didn't hit
You gotta an "addiction" to "dick son" so you gonna become "gay" and "dumb"
So do the "addition" your like "richard simmions" combined with "homer simpson"
^^nice
You like the "cafetiria lady" the way you let the "net" get to your "head"
Even if you "broke a pencil" you still wouldnt be "busting lead"
^^Liked 1st line...but 2nd suked
Angel knows im the best "so this guy" should just "admit it"
Cause the only thing on "top of I(eye)" is my "eyebrow" and "my fidit"
^^^wat ur eye got to do with angel?
Thoughts is like "larry bird" cause he got "balls" over the "net"
But when i see him in "the streets" he acts "small" and the beef he seems to "forget"
^^too basic
I always "seem" to get in the minds of people when i "instigate beef"
The only thing "mean" about your "rhymes" is the way they "discriminate heat"
^^OK....nutin special...just mediocre
Homie im known to "be mean" if i ask "for pussy" you'll just show "me your team"
Just gimme the "cream" before "Uzi" sprays your ass like a "tangerine"
^^your'e overdoin the glorifyin shit
Someone get tragic a "PACIFIER" so he can "CAN SUCK IN SILENCE"
He dont spit "FIRE" so some one break his fingers so we wont read "HIS WRITINGS"
^^Nice
I'll have you "bugging out" like i spit "you some raid"
You watch as the "light fades" like i pulled down the "the shades"
^^weak
These guys a "bad angel" cause he has trouble getting his "wings"
batteling "narc" then you gonna have trouble "getting some wins"
^^OK

Ur verse against Black Queen was better.This one,you were far too basic.It's Ok to glorify in a few lines....but you overdid it.This was a mediocre verse.Nutin special but still enough to give the win.

Vote-Narc-Uzi(vote in link below,please)
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=194851

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This was feedback posted for Godz Angel
 

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Voted For: NaRc-UzI

EZ....


gods, you had a decent structure, but thats the only props i can give you really...your verse was packed with fillers, no punches or personals so you need to fit them in next time man. A verse without them = wack.

Narc

You definately get this battle, although your structure was weak and the ""are wack you still had punchlines through out. Some were creativer and nice, others didnt really hit. But you get my vote for actually using punches.

NO HATE< RTF WITHIN 3 DAYS SO I DONT GOTTA DQ THIS VOTE!!

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Voted For: NaRc-UzI

I will start like the ladies in the breast cancer marathon,
Time to bust a sweat on your ass, like in a triatholon.
okay
Your like an iron you steam away your ideas through stress,
Not again, You let the big girl balloon tittys get to ya head.
no
But dont worry I aint dead, but ill be there to make sure you locked.
Your like your mother, dontstop my name tatooed on the cock.
decent
Pictures of me hung to drop, im the one who spoiled your crop,
nah
You make as much sense as a victoria secret magazine cover,
But I dont see nuthing but a thong you and your little brother.
aight
I dont even have a gun yet i still pistol wip your ass,
You can smell the fear when i walk in the room with a beer to pass,
nope
Take a sip and lie on the ground like wood taking your last gasp,
You are shit to me, im done with this faggot, My turn is passed.
no


If "angel" overdosed on "zantex" his "bars" still wouldnt be "ill"
He be looking "close" at my "text" saying that nigga "narc" got "skills"
aight
You gotta an "addiction" to "dick son" so you gonna become "gay" and "dumb"
So do the "addition" your like "richard simmions" combined with "homer simpson"
okay
You like the "cafetiria lady" the way you let the "net" get to your "head"
Even if you "broke a pencil" you still wouldnt be "busting lead"
koo
Angel knows im the best "so this guy" should just "admit it"
Cause the only thing on "top of I(eye)" is my "eyebrow" and "my fidit"
nah
Thoughts is like "larry bird" cause he got "balls" over the "net"
But when i see him in "the streets" he acts "small" and the beef he seems to "forget"
decent
I always "seem" to get in the minds of people when i "instigate beef"
The only thing "mean" about your "rhymes" is the way they "discriminate heat"
hmm, this one was aight
Homie im known to "be mean" if i ask "for pussy" you'll just show "me your team"
Just gimme the "cream" before "Uzi" sprays your ass like a "tangerine"
nah
Someone get tragic a "PACIFIER" so he can "CAN SUCK IN SILENCE"
He dont spit "FIRE" so some one break his fingers so we wont read "HIS WRITINGS"
decent closer

overall narc took this one, punches were harder, structure was
messed up, & the vocab needs a lil work, but overall u came harder

godz, ur drop was okay, but you need to work on ur punches tho