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B.I.G. 06-21-05 11:23 PM

Voted For: K-Trini

My goodness , wat I doin?, battlin a nine yr. old kid?/
"Gong" could hold a "show",but nodody' d eva go to it/
^^^^tight opener
Ur a tourist to this shit,So take ya beatin as a sovereign/
You get really raptorous when you hear men are near/
^^^^^creative
Im the white blood cells a dis bitch,killin for vital cause/
Gong dun flow,like blood in vaginas after menopause/
^^^^^tight vocab
Seems ya got nutin better to do,but put urself in ya sig./
Savein the youth,"SO SAY NO TO DOPE KID,YA DIG?????/
^^^^no, didn't felt that one, anyway a tight closin

Overall: good verse, good flow, structure and vocab
tight punchlines but no personals




Go ahead, mention cock to this little phone sex fanatic
And he'll be on the line longer than cocaine addicts!
^^^^tight opener
Now i'm not an advocate for bad habits but shit happens
Like just last week I saw Trini's girl leave him for...
*Points to the O.Gs* ................ Pure Knowledge.
^^^^^ good personal but you fucked up ur structure
You couldn't burn faggots with newspaper and matches
The only clips you bustin are on
............................................Email attachments.
^^^^^wtf?? didn't felt that one
Spirograph's my passion so I got you in a stencil...
And yeah you reload lead... In my mechanical pencil!
^^^^good one, creative
Get vocal in your sig, you're too antisocial for my innuendos
This kid 'DucKHunt' like he's at home playin super nintendo!
^^^^ that has no sence... but good punchline anyway

Overall: you fucked up your structure and your flow, the personal was weak and the punchline too, but you need to quit them non sences and improve ur vocab

V/ K-trini

RTF battles on my sig

Gongshow. 06-22-05 10:37 AM

Duck Cunt... bitch

K-Trini 06-22-05 06:58 PM

uppin.............................................

K-Trini 06-22-05 10:28 PM

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K-Trini 06-23-05 01:50 AM

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K-Trini 06-23-05 05:37 PM

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K-Trini 06-23-05 09:14 PM

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K-Trini 06-24-05 01:42 AM

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K-Trini 06-24-05 02:56 PM

uppin............................................. ....

K-Trini 06-24-05 06:03 PM

uppin.............................................

K-Trini 06-24-05 10:43 PM

uppin.............................................

K-Trini 06-25-05 02:23 AM

uppin............................................. .

K-Trini 06-25-05 08:17 PM

uppin............................................. ....

Kirk 06-26-05 12:04 PM

This was feedback posted for Gongshow.
 
checking polls.... i say you got this gong........

K-Trini 06-26-05 12:18 PM

uppin.............................................


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