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Pen and paper:
It’s the opener and this battle is already dominated
U can claim u are RAW but ull never get nominated
ehh... it's ok nigga.... 4/10
A fake gangsta tryin to think he knos bout narcotics and uzi’s
Stop telling lies cuz everyone knos u aint got it so don’t push me
nah........... 2/10
To the limit cuz it aint a gimmick I bring the WAR to RAW
Ur a blemish so u imperfect man so ur just a short flaw
meh............... 3/10
My rhymes will alter ur arrangement screwin ur scheme
Have u wonderin “OREO” while it blackens like cookies n crème
not bad....... 5/10
Have u wonderin in the “ocean” and when my punches hit u wont “sea”(see)
Cuz really u are “raw” ur rhymes stink like “raw fish” so think it narc-uzi
ok.... 6/10


overall, jus an ok verse. 20/50 (40%)

Narc dont get "cold-feet" cause hes a an "O-G" drinking a "40"
While this bitch only "holds-heat" when hes holding a "coffee"
meh... played.......... 3/10
Your rapping just "bores me" so im gonna rip this bastard faster than a "leopard"
The only disaster your causing is when u start showing the voters ur batteling "record"
ok................ 4/10
Keep relying on miracles cause in this battle "you wont last"
If i "chopped of both ya legs" u probably still think u could "kick my ass"
ok......... 5/10
I aint new to the rap game so when i win this battle it wont be "begginers luck"
To me its strange that you a living legend but when it comes to rapping dog u "really suck"
nah.......... 2/10
Are you outta your "mind' or are you just a fucking bitch ass "hood rat"
We might as well "combine" our verses together cuz they both makin you "look bad"
not bad........ 5/10


ehh.... bout the same as his verse. But jus a lil worse. lose the fuckin' quotes that shit annoys me like whoa!!! but ok verse. 19/50 (38%)

v/Pen and paper

RTF on this battle or I will delete this vote nah mean? :shoot:

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^wtf, how come it won't let me poll wtf? gay ass shit....... argh.......... :shoot:

uppin this cmon votes plz stopsleepin

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Voted For: Pen N' Paper

ok lets see:
PP:
It’s the opener and this battle is already dominated
U can claim u are RAW but ull never get nominated
ehh........ not a punch really.. 2/10
A fake gangsta tryin to think he knos bout narcotics and uzi’s
Stop telling lies cuz everyone knos u aint got it so don’t push me
same......... 2/10
To the limit cuz it aint a gimmick I bring the WAR to RAW
Ur a blemish so u imperfect man so ur just a short flaw
eh....... 3/10
My rhymes will alter ur arrangement screwin ur scheme
Have u wonderin “OREO” while it blackens like cookies n crème
not bad........ 5/10
Have u wonderin in the “ocean” and when my punches hit u wont “sea”(see)
Cuz really u are “raw” ur rhymes stink like “raw fish” so think it "narc-sushi"
nice try at wordplay......... 6/10

overall, your verse was pretty weak, and you picked it up a lil in the end. But you need to work in MORE wordplay and wit into your verse, nah mean? Help you out much more. Flow was pretty coo tho. Overall not bad, keep elevating yo. 18/50 (36%)[b/]

Ok, now to Narc:
Narc dont get "cold-feet" cause hes a an "O-G" drinking a "40"
While this bitch only "holds-heat" when hes holding a "coffee"
[b] not bad, good use of wordplay.... but kinda played 4/10
Your rapping just "bores me" so im gonna rip this bastard faster than a "leopard"
The only disaster your causing is when u start showing the voters ur batteling "record"
nah,......... 3/10
Keep relying on miracles cause in this battle "you wont last"
If i "chopped of both ya legs" u probably still think u could "kick my ass"
nah, played............... 2/10
I aint new to the rap game so when i win this battle it wont be "begginers luck"
To me its strange that you a living legend but when it comes to rapping dog u "really suck"
no......... too basic.......... 2/10
Are you outta your "mind' or are you just a fucking bitch ass "hood rat"
We might as well "combine" our verses together cuz they both makin you "look bad"
not that bad........... 4/10


Overall, you should add more wordplay and wit to your verses as well. Helps it be a much stronger verse. Also stop wit the " " unless it has a reason to be put in there. but good try tho. keep elevating. 15/50 (30%)

weak battle, but Pen came a lil harde.r. V/ pen

and RTF on this battle or vote WILL be removed. trust me:
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Pen n Paper

It’s the opener and this battle is already dominated
U can claim u are RAW but ull never get nominated
5/10..decent punch
A fake gangsta tryin to think he knos bout narcotics and uzi’s
Stop telling lies cuz everyone knos u aint got it so don’t push me
4/10...not that good...basic
To the limit cuz it aint a gimmick I bring the WAR to RAW
Ur a blemish so u imperfect man so ur just a short flaw
7/10...nice
My rhymes will alter ur arrangement screwin ur scheme
Have u wonderin “OREO” while it blackens like cookies n crème
4/10...not real good
Have u wonderin in the “ocean” and when my punches hit u wont “sea”(see)
Cuz really u are “raw” ur rhymes stink like “raw fish” so think it "narc-sushi"
6/10...decent wordplay

26/50

narc-uzi

Narc dont get "cold-feet" cause hes a an "O-G" drinking a "40"
While this bitch only "holds-heat" when hes holding a "coffee"
7/10...pretty good
Your rapping just "bores me" so im gonna rip this bastard faster than a "leopard"
The only disaster your causing is when u start showing the voters ur batteling "record"
6/10...decent
Keep relying on miracles cause in this battle "you wont last"
If i "chopped of both ya legs" u probably still think u could "kick my ass"
4/10...not real good
i aint new to the rap game so when i win this battle it wont be "begginers luck"
To me its strange that you a living legend but when it comes to rapping dog u "really suck"
3/10........weak
Are you outta your "mind' or are you just a fucking bitch ass "hood rat"
We might as well "combine" our verses together cuz they both makin you "look bad"
8/10...ur best

28/50

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Narc-Uzi had a dope closer, but other than that, wack battle

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yo pen this was really a good battle.....uppin..........

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