This was feedback posted for Alk3m1st
 

man you ripped this guy i would vote but it would look like a hate vote

This was feedback posted for Alk3m1st
 

"And I'll Have U Running Away Like U Were Bein Chased By HomoPhobics,"

That line dont make anysense case homophobics are people scared of gays.................................

Other than that tight battle

Voted For: CherryBluntZ

Like novacane I react and begin to numb shit and let my gun spit
This 'Goof Troop' is gonna crack up when he tastes Dis-knee (disney)
vs.
nothin
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and that one bar wasn't worded good at all but good attempt at wordplay
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and yo alk.. if u wanna see how shits done on this site check out the top ten punches here>>> http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=232646

Voted For: CherryBluntZ

Like novacane I react and begin to numb shit and let my gun spit
This 'Goof Troop' is gonna crack up when he tastes Dis-knee (disney)
ok second line but didn't rhyme, and gunplay is still wak and uncreative in text.

Make his piss bleed by stompin on this pricks kid knees
I didn’t bite shit you prewrite spits that’s obviously how you be winnin
didn't rhyme
Your unoriginal, not creative at all you just like every other rapper
Nobody’s hearin you ya like a bird squakin, want another cracker?
Wak but atleast you atempted to rhyme
You think you takin the win HAHAHA, shit no you just a sick joke
You think ya so hard but facin me made ya soft like ya dick broke
Poor punch but a punch nonetheless

You got cooked wit deez hot rhymes, my lyrics was the oven
Your nuthin I just beat your fuckin ass like a jealous husband
an atempt at a punch

Cherry, you getting a bit better. just need to get more into the rap thing and figuer out whats the difference between a punch written with a decent structure and a punch writen randomly and all over the place. keep elevating man.


See Alk3m1st A Monsta Fam, Watch The Hammer Blam, And Turn Ya Chest In Ta Mush Like CHERRY Jam,
Readin My Shit, Will Destroy Ya RAM, And Make Ya Pictures Go Blurry If U Gotta Cam...1
I Got The Gat Gripped, Tips Locked Loaded N Ready, Lets See How Ya Stomach Digest Food When Ya Abs Ripped,
My Hat To The Side Tipped, Leave "Cherry" Left Wet, Thats What I Call Body Clipped...2
I Stay Steady Tape The Mack, Blow Shots Thru Ya Spine So U Need To Tape Ya Back,
I Got To Much Dough, So I Need To Tape The Stack, And U Would Think U Were Fresh From The East, The Way I Wrapped Ya Head Like Dudes In Iraq...3
Its Easy To See, Alk3m!st Stays On The Ball Like Arobics,And I'll Have U Running Away Like U Were Bein Chased By HomoPhobics,
U A Fag Nigga, Go Play In Traffic Or Eat Some Dicks, Cuz Puttin On A Wig And Bra Is The Closest U Gettin To Chicks...4
Alk3m1st Will Crack Ya Back, For Talkin Dat Lingo, Slap U Constantly Till U Admit U Are A Bimbo,
My Verses Been Low, But Now Im Out To "Bend Backs" Like Bitches Doin Tha Limbo

wak. I dont even know where your lines end and start at really so I couldn't break this down properly. you should really look at some of the better battles on the site or peep out the tutorials and see what a verse should look like.

V/Cherrybluntz very hesitantly. return the favor with an honest vote on any battle you may see me in. peace.

Voted For: CherryBluntZ

ok both of you need to improve your structure
cherries lines didnt match up and alkemists lines wereee waaaaaaaay too long
lyrically you both had metaphores which i liked you both had played lines and neither of you had personals
so my vote is coming down to the flow i guess so imma give it to cherry