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This was feedback posted for un-fuck-widable
 

fuck you kid your not blood and your verse was wack.

Voted For: un-fuck-widable

un-fuck-widable

u cant touch-me,i love to eat up mc's,n right now im hung-ry
ya lyrics suck,u got better chance to beat me if ya lyrics wer count-ry
4/10....not feelin the country music punch..just didn't
im the one to elevate,u sit watch n hate,im the champ lik the pistons
u cant improve,its lik subtractin 0 cuz it aint gon make a difrence
8/10...nice! punch was hot...pistons aint the champs no more though
im the lyrical mc wit the hottest nouns,the underground unherd sound
the one to knock you down,like balls wit a BLIND jugglin clown
4/10...not really feelin the second line, first one was a good concept
dunt be mad cuz my raps get hits,back quick,wen they dunt like ya shit
ur a special child,one who wuld lose MUSICAL CHAIRS vs a DEAF KID
8/10...hahha...nice
ha,i'll laugh if i see you on mainstream,thas ur biggest dream
but thas never happenin like dead people wit GREAT hygene
5/10...it was ok...but kinda wack
im the hottest to be underground,i'll knock out this clown
cuz having a bohner in church is the only time u 'holdin it down'
6/10...lol....decent
i bet you aint no G,ur a computer nerd like anotha steve urkel
n u culdnt get a round of applause if i clapped in circles
6/10....it was aight

41/70....58.6%

Verbal_Pain

Ending this kids career,destroying his confidence quick
He lacks the ability of creativity,and the courage ta spit
6/10....kool...nice flow on this bar
Ima tear this cat, similar ta unwraping a gift i get for christmas
cuz comen down with syphillis, the only way he the sickest
5/10...ok...concept is played though
you new ta RV also,so i guess you considered ta be fresh meat
shouldv'e brung ya sun screen and shades cuz ima burn u with heat
5/10....it was ok...but again, very played
homie your not a challenge,prolly wont post and dip* mayne*
u a ho with a pimp who gets control'd daily like a sims game
6/10...nice concept
i know you unemployed,so your wrist?homie ho's say they seen no ice on it
spendin to much time cummin on ya keyboard...i dont see how u can type on it
3/10...played and not really well executed
lyrics sick,so ima continue ta use them to abuse this mark......you suck!
no wonder you cant See Da Point* like the worlds top Amusement Park (think)
7/10....ur best bar...like the cedar point wordplay

32/60....53%


un-fuck-widable took this in a pretty tight battle

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Voted For: Verbal_Pain

Unfukwidable

u cant touch-me,i love to eat up mc's,n right now im hung-ry
ya lyrics suck,u got better chance to beat me if ya lyrics wer count-ry

Umm, this was weak. Had no real punch and wasnt that creative.

im the one to elevate,u sit watch n hate,im the champ lik the pistons
u cant improve,its lik subtractin 0 cuz it aint gon make a difrence

Again, no. The first line was too basic and didnt hit at all as a punch. The second is just a played concept.

im the lyrical mc wit the hottest nouns,the underground unherd sound
the one to knock you down,like balls wit a BLIND jugglin clown

LOL! No. This was funny..but wack. Elevate.

dunt be mad cuz my raps get hits,back quick,wen they dunt like ya shit
ur a special child,one who wuld lose MUSICAL CHAIRS vs a DEAF KID

EHh, Average.

ha,i'll laugh if i see you on manstream,thas ur biggest dream
but thas never happenin like dead people wit GREAT hygene

Average. It wasnt really complex was and wasnt worded all taht great either.

im the hottest to be underground,i'll knock out this clown
cuz having a bohner in church is the only time u 'holdin it down'

Lol..humorous but played. You should have came more original there.

i bet you aint no G,ur a computer nerd like anotha steve urkel
n u culdnt get a round of applause if i clapped in circles

The first line is wack and played but the second is OK Actually.

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Verbal Pain

Ending this kids career,destroying his confidence quick
He lacks the ability of creativity,and the courage ta spit

Uhh, didnt really hit as a punch. Flowed OK though I guess.


Ima tear this cat, similar ta unwraping a gift i get for christmas
cuz comen down with syphillis, the only way he the sickest

Wack. This was just straight played.

you new ta RV also,so i guess you considered ta be fresh meat
shouldv'e brung ya sun screen and shades cuz ima burn u with heat

Again, this was weak. Ive heard this shit a million times. Just played out.

homie your not a challenge,prolly wont post and dip* mayne*
u a ho with a pimp who gets control'd daily like a sims game

This was weak..you should have been more vivid here.

i know you unemployed,so your wrist?homie ho's say they seen no ice on it
spendin to much time cummin on ya keyboard...i dont see how u can type on it

This didnt hit at all. It made no sense as a punch and was just wack all together.

lyrics sick,so ima continue ta use them to abuse this mark......you suck!
no wonder you cant See Da Point* like the worlds top Amusement Park (think)

Umm, this could have been pretty decent if u had reworded it. Decent concept, wack way of wording.

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Well, btoh need to elevate cuz you both came pretty weak but Id say Verbal Pain wins because he had better concepts. Both of you need to work on creativity and concepts alot more. Elevate and stay up.

Vote- Verbal pain

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Voted For: un-fuck-widable

real real close

both had decent punches
but un fuck widable had good word play and made me laugh several times

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