Bumpin this thing another time ........cmon.......votes

Bumpin this thing...maybe i can get some votes eh???

This was feedback posted for Paroxysm
 

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^thanks for nothing...anyways uppin this thing............

Voted For: Paroxysm

Damn........thats a lot of lines so i'm just gonna go for the basics...

u had a very good opening with a sick closure.............







the best punch:
Cause im hoping we elope to change her name and her address
So im face to face with stress, but the way she fits that dress

weakest line:
We stayed awake for hours talking how our future may be paved
Then she fell asleep in my arms, we woke up the next day at 8........






very nice drop there::::::::






Vote:Paroxysm

bumpin once again .....................................

This was feedback posted for Gongshow.
 

that other guy shit too long....good luck trya get votes....

Voted For: Paroxysm

Wat a damn story hands down I dint even wanna read your opponent's say Hot shit mayne keep it up ........

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Voted For: Paroxysm

Aii

Paroxysm
Aii Man Your Topical Was Very Very very Long For Starters But You Did Stay On Point And You Did State Your Topical Opinion Very Precise And You Had Very Nice Vocab And Imagery Mixed in Inside of This Topical and Then You Stayed On Topic Threw The Whole Thing Which Is kind Of Hard To Do if You Have a Long Drop Like Your Some People Jus Type Forever Lol But You Stayed on Point And You Dropped Some a Nice Point Of View of The Topic My Favorite Lines Were These Rii Here:
Engaged with a hang over…I left bed yawning
Took a piss and went down stairs for a fresh egg omelet
Came back to ask jaine…”you want break-fast mommy”
And I gasped cause it wasn’t her but her best friend bonnie

LOl Your Like an RV R.Kelly lol Except You wasnt Trapped In The Closet lol Nice Stroyline man Good Drop You Get my vote in This Battle
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Gongshow
ai man Your Piece was Shirt And Its Nuttin Wrong With keepin your drops simple Sometimes In These Topicals BUT....when you got a Topic as of what you guys had yous houldve came alot more coplex and a little more creative seems like you were crammin all your thoughts and Ideas in like 2 lines each and it didnt seem like you was really feelin what you was sayin and all so I wasnt feelin your drop that much man Im sorry to say ..............So You couldnt get my vote in ths batlle man srry no hate

PLEASE RTf in my battle Link