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Voted For: Lawless (Hs)

flow verse was ok but really uninspired
n boring

lawless killed him with concepts and better delivery

This was feedback posted for Lawless (Hs)
 

it's plain to see Lawless got this but i can't vote but he had a longer verse wit better punchlines the only downfall is the it looks like it was written think about it but big up law do yo thing man

Voted For: flow verse

yo dis was an ok battle but i feel like flow verse could've came harder than wat he did and his structure wasn't great yo lawless that spacing u left between ur bars i don't like dat but overall lawless came harder with punches and personals he took this one and ran with it

V/Lawless

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Voted For: Lawless (Hs)

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nice verses

for a short vers flow u came aight i must say but lawless got it
even though u r personals almost didnt exsist u had nice punche man

flow i liked the grape line it was the bet thing u apit next time though come harder wit a lil more punches and personals say more about him cause he got u

nice job

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Voted For: Lawless (Hs)



Alright listen up . . .
Yo after this your gonna be like a “hunger clock” and go back “four seconds”/
To the point, before you agreed to battle and hit accept it/
-wack no personal probably prewritten played concept horrible choice for an opener 5/10
I know u think you the best and might go against RV’s “judgments”/
Cat just does understand rank u could say he’s “lawless”/
-no personal but it wasnt horrible i guess 6/10
And I know types like you --- just like “grapes”/
Just “whine” after getting “smash” by greats/
-creatie but no personal once again 7/10
In this battle you came so close but it wasn’t enuff/
Like “Viagra” salesman, who just “couldn't keep up”/
played concept bad closer no personal 6/10
OVERALL U NEED TO WORK ON UR STRUCTURE EVENIN OUT UR LINES AND LOSING THE /// PERSONALS THATS HOW UR GONNA WIN BATTLES U HAD NO METAPHORES AND WORDPLAY WAS BASIC OVERALL U NEED ALOT OF ELEVATION



Shit... I had every intention of harmin' the fella/
I'll put a knot on ya head the size of the tits on Carmen Electra/PLAYED NO PERSONAL BAD OPENER 6/10

homie jettin' cause the rocs reflection remind of siren lights/
nigga my fist will tat ya face up.. so you can have sumtin' in common wit iron mike/
NEVER HEARD IT B4 BUT NO PERSONAL 6/10
trust the brute force uh' leave tha nigga checked/
STOP.. before I pop and put you in a box like Newport ciggarettes/
CREATIVE LINE 7/10
Look BITCH... I've already dismanteled ya verse/
at age 8 this punk was rockin' pumps and knew how to handle a purse/PLAYED AS HELL WORST LINE IN THE BATTLE 5/10

I got the machete I beheaded the last nigga/
don't front chump.... the only thing sprayin' from ya pump is unleaded gas nigga/
PLAYED BLAH 6/10
you still leanin' behind even if you was double teamin' the rhyme/
you a PUSSY that take more punches then any teen at the prom/PRETTY GOOD NOTHIN SPECIAL THOUGH 6/10

I don't give a fucc what people a think/
I'll see to it you got denchers by the time you legal to drink/
GAY AS HEL 6/10

yea bring ya hoe niggaz to get on my back/
even if you was a contract killer you still couldn't put a 'hit' on the track/
PLAYED BUT BETTER THAN ANY OF HIS LINES 7/10
you prolly roll wit bitches in fact..../
fucc wit me and ya life span uh' be shorter then the dick in ya lap/PLAYED BAD STRUC 6/1O

Flow Verse?.. shit I neva even heard of dude/
I'm bout ready to cock back and pop caps till ya dome resemble gerber food/ GOOD LINE CREATIVE U USED HIS NAME THATS FIRST IN THIS BATTLE 8/10
OK U NEED TO WORK ON PERSONALS AND STOP GLORIFYIN URSELF WORK ON VOCA ABD STRUCTURE
OVERAL IM VOTIN FOR U BECAUSE UR LINES WERENT AS PLAYED AS HIS