if by complex you mean forced....then yes.

you really need to improve your wording and flow....you dont have to rhyme twice on a line, because alot of the time, if comes off as cheesey and forced. no offense, you have nice concepts, you just need some tuning to make it more effective

dizzee, i enjoyed your verse man, closer was funny, nice concepts, and you made them work.....well done

v/dizzee

^ i rhyme twice on a line...becuz thats HOW I DO IT sometimes....thats how i want to do it....i cud very very split each line into two lines....would that make the wordin easier?....im not shortening my lines...or spittin different...imma be me....

ight, one of yu tell me how yu would write it?....put on of my bars in yur terms.....

Personally i thought Artiks verse was fyre but im used 2 her flow though

^im not trippin dizzee...theyve never lyked my style...especially back when i used all the |*...!!//

yu've elevated....i respects that

..........werd :)

i didn't say shorten them......i said your shit is forced, and fuckin stupid to read because your rhyme scheme is basic and forced

you wanna elevate? then change your fuckin structure up, cause you have a shitty way of doing things; you have good concepts, but you're ruining your shit with forced multies and horrible wording

FORCED

Dizzee Rascal wins by KO.
Artik Phrost loses.

This thread is now closed.

Moved to Closed Battles.