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NaRc-UzI 07-14-05 07:43 PM

return the favor since i voted on yas battle ya can vote on my battle

http://community.rapverse.com/showb...ad.php?t=199762

Pair-A-Docks 07-14-05 08:08 PM

uppin I will get to that battle later on ok? ^^^^

nonchalant 07-14-05 08:35 PM

uppin' for votes...

nonchalant 07-15-05 12:20 AM

uppin' for votes...

Confucius 07-19-05 07:09 PM

Voted For: nonchalant

http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=199108
both of u return the favor or vote will be dqed

nonchalant got my vote cause he came harder with his punches.
pair-a-docks u hot man but your punches were not hittin as hard no hate at all man u did your thing aight

well thats my vote return the honest favor or it will be dqed
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=199108

nonchalant 07-24-05 12:02 PM

uppin for votes

QuadID 07-24-05 12:20 PM

This was feedback posted for Pair-A-Docks
 
wit that in mind then it's nothin really missin' to say

Confucius 07-24-05 12:39 PM

yo i asked yall to returnthe favor man so heres a link

http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=200482

nonchalant 07-26-05 05:00 PM

uppppinnnnnnnnnnnn

nonchalant 07-30-05 02:20 PM

uppinnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnn

nonchalant 08-07-05 07:30 PM

uppinnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnn

noname 08-07-05 09:09 PM

Voted For: nonchalant

Kid....how do you think you gonna win writing bad rap and stuff like that...
You look FOOLISH....got Em saying, "I ain't never seen an ASS like that"...
^^^weak and basic......2/10
Kid you're all clammed up...you need to at least try to get out ya shell...
I would say that you might win...but kid there I really doubt you will...
^^^shell/will...doesn't rhyme...weak punch...2/10
You think that you can rap kid.....well guess what...I don't believe you...
Cause honestly...your lines are as stupid...as a line for a movie preview...
^^HuH?....weak.....2/10
You can't free-style....cept maybe wit ya clothes from the Goodwill...
Dogg your punches couldn't hit me.....even if I just stood still...
^^That punches can't hit/stand still is played..2/10
Don't try to throw blows my way kid.....cause ya disses I can't feel...
How ya think you'll win.......when you can't elevate past an ant hill!
^^feel/hill...doesn't rhyme...weak punch again!..2/10

Man...all your punches were weak.I see you got the structure....but aside from that...there was nothing.A lot of your rhymes didn't rhyme.Make every line rhyme.Then...your punches...they were weak.You were just stating stuff.Get some wordplay and metas and such.

Check it..i will pulverize this kid..turn his flesh into ashes
He's..runnin' out of 'shine' like a 'light bulb' that 'flashes'
^^^basic and played.....2/10
When he's playin 'basketball'..that's the only time he's 'runnin for the block'(reppin)
It's obvious he likes thing in 'twos'..so let's give pair-a-docks a pair-of-cocks
^^OMG....uncreative as fuck....1/10
It's 'funny' how he's confident battlin' me..he's a fuckin' 'joke'
Only time he fuckin' looks 'big' is if he put on two fluffy 'coats'
^^Basic....2/10
I'm new to RV..but the new kid will still eat ya
Only way he's 'toppin' me if he was 'pepperoni' and i was the 'pizza
^^meh...maybe yo best line..though still weak..4/10'
To beat me is impossible...like bein' a Pussy-AndDick(pair-a-docks)
Put this dude on a 'strawberry'..cuz i 'creamed' him and gave his ass a 'whip'
^^^PLAYed....2/10

HAd too many played lines.Flow and structure was good.Just get some more creative shit.You seemed to be saying things just because they rhyme...like that pair a docks/pair a cocks line.The best line is this whole battle was probably the pizza/toppin one.SO ya got my vote for better punches and actually rhyming in every line.

Vote-NonChalant
RTF PLEASE
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=203256
^^^c'mon...i gave both of you feedback to help you improve

nonchalant 08-21-05 01:23 AM

upppppppppinnnnnnnnnnnn

Lay-z 08-24-05 02:16 AM

Voted For: nonchalant

very nice verse, came harder, musta wanted it more....but overall had some good flow to it also..

V/Nonchalant


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