Voted For: VISION

umm I guess Vision cuz he actually punched lol..this battle sucked ass, u guys need to read more

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Voted For: blackfrostbite

Flow-Blackforst bite had lines that didn't rhyme.Future and muses doesn't rhyme.I gotto go with Vision in flow.But both of you get rid of the basic rhyme shcmeme.

Punches-Well....neither had anything hot.But Vision had some that had no purpose.Like that Rime/rhyme line.Stupuid.I go with Frostbite here.

Personals-Neither....both sucked here.

Multis-Neither...same as personals.

Originality-Probaboly Black frost bite though neither of you were creative.

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I was wondering why the polls were 4-1 on Vision's favor...FrostBite....go report these votes here as they were unexplained and probably d/r.There is no way you should lose this battle like this.

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Voted For: blackfrostbite

fucking week battle, but blackfrostbite took this battle easyli

yo quit tryin to be Raven,you can't see in da future/
'member Ray Charles and Stevie are ya muses/
EEE WELL IT DOSINT RHYMES
haha,dis amuses me,lol,you make me laugh/
i can see ahead of time though when i hit da blunt to fast/
THE FIRST LINE WAS JUST A BUNCH A WORD THAT U TYPED RANDOM LOL
yo head to da doc,have ya eyes checked out/
cuz i want you to be able to read da bars im tossin out/
THIS WASINT REALLY A PUNCH, JUST SOMETHING U WANT HIM TO DO
ouch!dat right must be like a stab to ya eye/
in ya sig,dat skull resembles ya face,its in ya eye/
TWO TIME THE SAME RHYME, AND IT WAS WEAK
dis is so obvisous,anyone could see it/
how you gone have a name like vision,but ya loss you couldn't see it/
THIS WAS KINDA YA BEST BAR, EVEN IF THE STRUCTURE WAS BAD...SO WATCH UR STRUCTURE AND ELEVATE

vote: blackfrostbite

thnx fam,both of yall,yeah i did report to strobe im waitin on da results though

Voted For: VISION

weak battle !... but

Vote = Vision

not much 2 explain but...
Punches were alil harder (still needs improvement)
wordplay was alil more complex (still needs improvement)
metaphors...blah...none in this battle

frostbite u were jus sayin the same thing over n over about an eye...n none of it was hittin hard...work on ur punches !

so the slight edge goes to Vision


would apreciate the favor to be returned from both of yall wit da battle in my sig....

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thnx fam....................................
uuuuuuuuuupppppiiiiiiiinnnnn
for more votes
returnin fav to macreep right now

Voted For: VISION

BlackFrostbite

yo quit tryin to be Raven,you can't see in da future/
'member Ray Charles and Stevie are ya muses/
^NO, doesnt rhyme nor duz it go together^
haha,dis amuses me,lol,you make me laugh/
i can see ahead of time though when i hit da blunt to fast/
^no punches here basic rhyming^
yo head to da doc,have ya eyes checked out/
cuz i want you to be able to read da bars im tossin out/
^Rhymed the same word twice...not a punch at all^
ouch!dat right must be like a stab to ya eye/
in ya sig,dat skull resembles ya face,its in ya eye/
^rhymed the same word twice this time u gave half a punch^
dis is so obvisous,anyone could see it/
how you gone have a name like vision,but ya loss you couldn't see it/
^Once again rhymed the same word twice.....a full punch, nice ending^

Vision

You've got the wrong kind of RIME/Rhyme
and now you're Frozen in time,
but that heat that VISION speaks
will defrost you're behind.
^Good opener weak punch though...multis are good^
You stumbled across a lyrical boss mr.frost,
or should i say frosty u softy, take a loss.
^Good nice multis and sharp punch right there^
This wanna b stepped in front of me,
now it's slushies on the house.
he ain't talkin no more.
I put a lid on his mouth.
^ok multis.....good punch ^

With this sick,twisted,verbalistic rhyming device.
think twice, i'm precise
and you're slippin on ice.
^Crazy multis ok punch excellent finis^

v/vision

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Voted For: blackfrostbite

yo quit tryin to be Raven,you can't see in da future/
'member Ray Charles and Stevie are ya muses/
^^OK....liked 1st line more....4/10
haha,dis amuses me,lol,you make me laugh/
i can see ahead of time though when i hit da blunt to fast/
^^No punch.....2/10
yo head to da doc,have ya eyes checked out/
cuz i want you to be able to read da bars im tossin out/
^^No punch.....1/10
ouch!dat right must be like a stab to ya eye/
in ya sig,dat skull resembles ya face,its in ya eye/
^^woulda been better if ya didn't rhmye the same words...3/10
dis is so obvisous,anyone could see it/
how you gone have a name like vision,but ya loss you couldn't see it/
^^Best Bar here.....6/10

OK...ight verse here.Had some lines in the middle that didn't hit...it was you lip-smacking.That last bar may have won it for you though.Overall...a good verse...5/10

You've got the wrong kind of RIME/Rhyme
and now you're Frozen in time,
^^what the hell?..the frozen shit coulda been better..2/10
but that heat that VISION speaks
will defrost you're behind.
^^No punch....1/10
You stumbled across a lyrical boss mr.frost,
or should i say frosty u softy, take a loss.
^^No punch...stop talkin shit and diss....1/10
This wanna b stepped in front of me,
now it's slushies on the house.
he ain't talkin no more.
I put a lid on his mouth.
^^NO.....2/10

Ok...poor structure and poor flow.Here wat...get some wordplay and metas.You were too basic.That 1st bar woulda been hot if you had some better wording.Try making your line longer too.

Vote-BlackFrostBite
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With this sick,twisted,verbalistic rhyming device.
think twice, i'm precise
and you're slippin on ice.

thnx fam uuuuppppiiiinnnnn
all i need iz two more

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Voted For: VISION

Neither of the verses were mind boggling.. but VISION had some precision in this one..
Flow - Vision had this cuz his lines strung togehter better than Frost's did
Punches - I didnt even see strong punches is Frost's verse at all.. VISION got this with personals attacking his opponents name
Multis - Neither had strong enough multies to be voted on..

All in All.. v/ vision

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once more
we need mo votes
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Voted For: VISION

straight verse, bette wordplay, better structure, better overall...