This was feedback posted for Barz&Penstripes
 

I know i can't vote yet, but if I could, Barz&Pinstripes would get my vote for the win. He keeps his lines more organized, and his syllables are pretty consistent. I also must say though that despite his good hits and points, he is a still a little all over the place and unfocused. I give him the win, but not by much. I would give him a C-. Peace Back

Voted For: Barz&Penstripes

Listen I destroy legends like crash dummies and drug addiction
This prophecies young 100% bullshit unrealistic born of fiction
After me u'll need oven mittens & robotic arms to grasp da mic
Its Common to sense "the bitch in yoo" like Hermaphrodites
In your Sig Hov is apparent within a blue backdrop embarassed
Go fig ur flows soft like Qtip ends and Gaylord Fockers parents
A gunblast to the head would help you better off the mental
Get the lead out your ass you might write better off the pencil
This is friendly fire a display of Cain and Abel in sentence
Punch this pussy in the mouth leave'em tampons to spit with
Clean his lips with, sulk, moan and bitch with, alone I pitch dis
In reality get your chin check and broke like asian dishes
4/10


Introspective...dahhs and do's from idolizing fools/I awake to bake, quake, and demolish you/ recieve ha's and oooh's from fantizing spoofs/ from the lyrical Armageddon i cast upon this goof/You couldn't destroy anything if i gave you a wrecking ball/ and the weather is surely hot but ya rhymes are not at all/In time you'll realize everyone had tried and failed/ but you i make an example hanging you on a wall with nails/ Like before i said i shall come like a thief in the night/ Your finished! cuz your more played out the white boy's pickin up mic's(hahaha)/I pause time just second to think of the next line/thinkin to myself "Nigga i'ma kill em' wit this rhyme!"/Stupid wannabe Microphones are rappers...Cool?/ and ya fuckin lines are shittier than a sample of dog stool(dog shit)/I come wit more tracks than a CD see!/ and i rhyme harder than them niggaz on Smack DVD/ and the name barz&penstripes that's so confusing/and i flip more niggaz the fucking circus amusements//
3/10

v/Barz&Penstripes... for better punches, nothing special, both need to elevate,

pz

This was feedback posted for Barz&Penstripes
 

y0 tHaT sHiT wUz FiRe SuN!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Voted For: Barz&Penstripes

better verse, better structure, better wordplay, liked it more..