This was feedback posted for Spoken Word
 

hahahaha

ez man, this were strate fire.

good shit.

ko.

Voted For: Spoken Word

Sorry nomak, im posting now, Cuz im a little pressed for time
This fake mc, 'Got in way over his head' like an 'entrance sign'
^^^OK...set-up bad though
Im not gonna be nice, I got a wide range of artillery man
Nomak'll get 'Fed Ex' And i aint talking about a delivery van*
^^^OK......set up bad
You knew the outcome, Why would you battle this vet
I got a deal coming soon, But you still collabing in text
^^you a vet?wat the point of that set up though?

Good verse.Need to work on your set-ups.HAd some decent concepts.Best line was the 2nd with the over the head one.COulda been better though.

don't mean to be rude but - i'll simply smash you dude.
cuz the only way you steaming a-head is giving it inna boiler room.
^^^set up badely..Ok punch
you're weak & fragile guy - i'll crack you when you smile.
wackness for you would be a country - if it was state of mind.
^^NO.....
my verse'll reap hell - i mean Spoken is garbage s'why he smell.
you see, i don't have to distribute computers to hand you de/ll's.
^^OK........

Good verse as well.Also...you need to work on your set-ups.It must be relevant to punchline in some way.ONly reason you lost was because I wasn't feelin your middle bar.

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