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Voted For: B-MAC


SPoken WOrd-mediocre verse in my opinion.worded ya shit nicely.but content was boring to say the least.I'm sorry...but these emotional peices are cliche now due to the amount it't being used.Ya concept was basic to the topic.Try to use some unique ideas for the concept.An average verse.

B-Mac-Good verse.I love that sniper concept.I liked your verse better.Unique concept.But your content coulda been a little better....but it all good as you actually kept me awake...a rare thing in topicals these days.Ya wording was a lil..meh.Work on that.

Vote-B-Mac for better concept and more intruiging content.

Hit one my battles in sig.

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Voted For: Spoken Word

ok B-Mac...almost anyone could write a topical like that, good vocab and ok flow and all but it wasnt as creative as Spokens. Spoken u had good flow but I think u need to ahve more emotion and a lil bit more imagery and ull be killing them. V/Spoken for more creativity....please hit the battles up in my sig

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Voted For: Spoken Word

I vote for spoken word, becuz of his use of vocab and his way to generate a good and emotional piece for the topic....this was a close battle both very good, but b-mac u lost me through ur rhyme...."With out a sound to be heard, no one says a word.
As I lay atop this mound, Motionless I glare into my scope" yo man that dont rhyme........no hate just stating my opinion and thats my vote

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Voted For: Spoken Word

B-MAC-Good verse.Flow was on-point through the whole thing.DIdn't like the basic rhyme scheme that you had in the verse though.But you had nice internals.Wording was good.COntent as a whole needs to be upped a notch.The concept was meh.

Spoken Word-Flow was good.I like the multis you had.Better structure than B-Mac.Wording was better too.Concept seemed to also follow along with the topic better.But the content was where i think you blew him out.Better description and vocabulary by far.

Vote-Spoken Word
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http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=203166

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Voted For: Spoken Word

Spoken - This was a good drop. Not hall of fame..but not hall of shame. You came decent with imagery. Emotion could have been more present. But it was too dull. Vocab wasnt amazing either. You took an approach that is too basic in my eyes. Go within the topic and be creative. As a writer you gotta experiment to get better. But anways back onto the piece. Flow was good. Rhyme scheme was alright, kinda eh in some spots. You stayed on topic. Go deeper with your descriptions and try to use internal rhyming. Not a bad drop man.

B-MAC - Okay first off, your rhyme scheme messed this up horribly. You need to rhyme to make it flow. And your flow was effected the way you wrote this. The vocab wasnt great. Imagery was attempted but didnt help much. Emotion was very limited in this. You took a different approach but you didnt do it well. It was sorta clever but you didnt succeed in doing it. A very basic drop and it didnt earn the win. Sorry but you outmatched this time.

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