Thanks for the good feed, ima return now.

Good stuff Daubs. Good flow and structure.

.'This isnt about power, its deeper, the ultimate test..
..With one final praer i tie my gloves and hope for the best'

That was the best line, it was the killer punch after you had built up the tension.

safe^

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Aw Naw Again Some Dream Ass Poetry You Didn't Get Grimy Hell Put This In A Story Book Not Rap At All You Wrote This For Poetry Heads And Again Fuck Poetry No True Atitude In That Shit

Its not poetry you herb, its a tpical..the topic was fight night.

I can do grimey shit too, check some battles / om's.

this was a nice drop

good wordplay

had kind of an ol school structure

that seems 2 be everyones begining structure

but this was str8 drop

7/10

yea i agree w/ tha majority on diz 1 overall it was a great piece fa sho i like ur imagery, structure, multi'z & tha concept ...but da missing link in it was ur vocab u need work on dat but othawise ur good keep writing & elevating

safe...........

yo man nice drop i like the nice imagery, good multis and such...vocab wass iight could up on that.....nice sttructure, made it flow nice....8/10 man keep postin and shit

rtf on my sig links.......1

good drop....imagery was crazy......flow was nice...vocab was aight.....structure was really good....emotion was high in this drop........good ending 2.....rtf...any link in ma sig

ima return them 2 later.

This was a good piece that held descriptive content...great vocab & good flowing multis..The imagery was solid, which made ya complexity good & realistic..seeing how boxers fight so they kids can eat..as in this case..The idea was creative as well & held a mediocre depth toward the entire piece..

The only thing I didn't like is that you didn't elaborate on the topic..it's seems more like a good story that doesn't finish..I feel it would've been better if it was extended..but overall it was a nice piece..keep doing what you do