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upping this battle for some votes, i will return the favor
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This was feedback posted for Spoken Word
Good shits from both.
Both came hard...gonna be close imo. |
This was feedback posted for Spoken Word
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http://forums.b-boys.com/vbforum/sh...ad.php?t=205343 Click this URL. Then hold Ctrl and hit F, search for the word clap and you'll find a surprise :). |
ssame concept, its a played bar, ive seen similar concepts for alot of bars i see on this board.
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Whoo.. i think we have ourself here a bitter...
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Voted For: BoneCollector
BC You a Livin Legend.. But bitch you aint got one win under your belt? Ill put my nut sack in ya hand.....and my flow still couldnt be felt...! wooot woot. solid opener. Nice punch really set this up for a decent drop.. Nice imagery (no homo) eww go spoken ..'ina state of mind'..that he doesnt know what to do.. Cus when you set up this battle without me known'n..i said who are you? ^ ok bar, bit of a filler... New to rv..and you think you can take on one of the oldest vets.. Cus ill put shots in ya dawg..and i aint talking about ya household pets.. ^^ haha nice, bit of wordplay in there. good punch So now think hard was this really a good idea for me to battle Bc.. Cus this nucca's gon give you alose..and watch All of Rv agree.. ^ ok bar, another some what filler. Still nice but should of dropped somthing more hard hitting here. That your just another wack emcee...tryin to get fame by battling me.. So go home and plee..or god please..dont let me lose!..I'll go down to 1 knee.. ^^ haha nice, I liked this felt it was hard hitting and brought the level of your drop back. And you call yourself a rap veteran..when you aint gon win this? I can half assed...and Spoken words who?I dont think he exist..! ^ ok closure, could of come alot stronger though SW I'll smack this geek, His only two talents are whack and weak Lighting a suitcase on fire is the only time youre packing heat ^ nice opener. So if youre smart, You'll beat it, Edit your verse and delete it Youre probably reading that, Nodding ya head and agreeing ^ blah didnt rhyme, didnt even hit. Im gonna dig up your grave, So i can easily collect your bones And leave ya with no chance to talk, Like disconnected phones ^ reasonable punch. didnt feel the play on his name Stop lickin the cock dude, You think youre tight, But I'll rock you Cause your just a bitch underneath, Like a chick in a costume ^ blah weak So first Im'a target your torso, With at least a hundred hits Denmark ya face, Cuz you dont know what Europe against ^ wtf? umm NO Shit bone, My skills are killer, And im making you fear that By punching you in the forehead and makin your ears clap ^ blah no punch and a crucial point inthe battle. Vote bonecollecter |
Voted For: Spoken Word
>You a Livin Legend.. But bitch you aint got one win under your belt? Ill put my nut sack in ya hand.....and my flow still couldnt be felt...! wtf? not a punch 2/10 >I go spoken ..'ina state of mind'..that he doesnt know what to do.. Cus when you set up this battle without me known'n..i said who are you? meh, worded blahh, and weak 4/10 >New to rv..and you think you can take on one of the oldest vets.. Cus ill put shots in ya dawg..and i aint talking about ya household pets.. you're an old vet, thats it....self glore 0/10 >So now think hard was this really a good idea for me to battle Bc.. Cus this nucca's gon give you alose..and watch All of Rv agree.. not a punch 0/10 >That your just another wack emcee...tryin to get fame by battling me.. So go home and plee..or god please..dont let me lose!..I'll go down to 1 knee.. not a punch 0/10 >And you call yourself a rap veteran..when you aint gon win this? I can half assed...and Spoken words who?I dont think he exist..! yes he does exist, and he never said he was rap veteran 0/10 overall: 6/10 sorry to be so harsh, but your verse really sucked, elevate. >I'll smack this geek, His only two talents are whack and weak Lighting a suitcase on fire is the only time youre packing heat meh, alright 5/10 >So if youre smart, You'll beat it, Edit your verse and delete it Youre probably reading that, Nodding ya head and agreeing no, 1/10 >Im gonna dig up your grave, So i can easily collect your bones And leave ya with no chance to talk, Like disconnected phones played 2/10 >Stop lickin the cock dude, You think youre tight, But I'll rock you Cause your just a bitch underneath, Like a chick in a costume not bad 4/10 >So first Im'a target your torso, With at least a hundred hits Denmark ya face, Cuz you dont know what Europe against nice wordplay, best punch right here 9/10 >Shit bone, My skills are killer, And im making you fear that By punching you in the forehead and makin your ears clap meh, decent 5/10 overall: 25/60....word, one sided match right here, all the way, spoken actually had punches, bone's was just some random dribble, with self-glore, nothing, at all......so spoken easily gets this. v/spoken word |
This was feedback posted for Spoken Word
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Voted For: BoneCollector
Flow-Both Metas-Bone Vocab-Spoken Multies-None Punches-Bone Structure-Both Wordplay-Bone Personals-Uhmmm Creativity-None Really Enjoyment-Bone Complexity-Bone Your Vote-Bone Explanation- Punches win battles and Bone had more of those. He also had some nice metas and rhyming was on point. SPoken could have had some harder punches and he might have gotten my vote. Bome was a bit more complex with his internals. |
This was feedback posted for Spoken Word
Alright.. This verse got a good a flow.. good punchlines..
I like how you use the "bones" out of his name too.. Good verse.. I didnt get to Bone's yet.. but im not complaining about yours.. |
Voted For: BoneCollector
decent disses from both corners on this one... spoken had some good punches nd wordplay but nothing was hitting too hard.. they were good but nothin id throw at a vet.. BC had some good punches aswell and i felt he came a little harder and really touched on spoken on a more personal level .. also had some pretty good wordplay and it had a nice flow to it.. decent battle.. both came hard but BC came just that much harder my vote - BoneCollector |
This was feedback posted for Spoken Word
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BC lets be honest. Your verse wasnt hot. The only reason that i only got 2 votes is because im unknown on this name. I guarantee if we do another battle same verses, ill win if i was on my flow intelligent name.
Thats the only thing i never liked about RV. The D/Ring because of 'vet' status. |
BC lets be honest. Your verse wasnt hot. The only reason that i only got 2 votes is because im unknown on this name. I guarantee if we do another battle same verses, ill win if i was on my flow intelligent name.
Thats the only thing i never liked about RV. The D/Ring because of 'vet' status. |
Maybe its me.. but i cant sit and put together either one of the verses in this battle.. the flow just isnt there. It looks like you thought of words, wrote a bunch of shit, and made the last word rhyme with no layout to ur rhythm.. I cant vote cuz im too new.. but im just givin some feedback to dwell on.
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