Uppin..........

hmmm... this was a decent piece overall.. i could see what u were trying to do with it.. u just didnt execute ur thoughts very well... ur metaphor's were nice.. but not used in the best ways.. and i think u need to work on ur grammar a bit.. it makes for an easier read...
well overall i know u can do better but this piece was decent. 6.5/10

Cool Uppin.....

good for poetry heads but not even rap at all just didn't rhyme enough i just wonder is the poetry site empty boy do we have some stuff on this board for them like this piece right here no atrtitude just soft like jell-o

^^ Um........You stupid...That is all......Bye

need dto get ghetto with this bring some action

Would you please leave?.........Seriously. Thank you.

remember when you dont return favours though?

This was a pretty tight peice..yorus tructure was good..your flow was on point..you had nice emotions..and good feeling going into your drop..i could really see that you took time out to do this drop..and i really thank you for that ...You also had nice imagery..and nice wordplay and vocab usuage.. Keep it up

Thanx........Uppin....

this was good man, imagery was very good, emotion was good, flow and structure were good, keep it up man

Thank you. Uppin.

I liked this piece, your take on a killer was nice, but your similies were becoming kinda tedious. One or two is fine, but I don't like everything being a metaphor or similie. Be straight up sometimes. The imagery was nice and so was the emotion. Overall, this piece was definately worth the read, but try re wording your hook.

Thank you. Uppin.