fuck!!!! Can u people please fucking vote..I always vote back so please vote

damn u people!!!!!! please fucking vote on this!!

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y0 tHaT sHiT wUz FiRe SuN!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Can u people please Fucking vote on this!!!! its been open for hecka long....

Come on ppl vote on this for christs sakes...I will return all votes fairly I swear jsut frikkin vote

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i think u got this but i was just checkin polls
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YO!!!!!!!!!!!vote on this people, this has been open for hecka long for reals, Ill vote honestly back in return

Rrraaaaahhhhhhh!!!!! frikkin vote on this u beaches!!!!

OMFG.....upping this..this battle is so old it actually deserves votes! come on!

Voted For: Rile1

Shodown

Man, I didn't like how you developed the storyline at all. I understand how you were thinking, but it was just predictable as hell. Your rhyme scheme was simple with only one word rhyming (e.g. match/scracth, dick/script). Because of how you went about the topic, there left no room for imagery as you were just talking about yourself and how you write good lyrics and shit. You made an attempt to toss in emotion (mainly anger, I guess), but it didn't come out how it should have. Everything seemed forced, and it all traces back to your lack of a decent storyline.

Rile1

Your storyline was a little shaky throughout the whole topical. I could see where you were going, but at times you were forcing multis which tossed the storyline sometimes. Your rhyme scheme was pretty decent.. I like the multiple rhyming at the end of lines (e.g. Monday/some day, near deadly/fear heavy), and even though the multis got kind of annoying, they were consistent, so it wasn't as bad as it could have been. You had slight imagery.. not that much.. but a decent amount of emotion to go with it.

Overall

Shodown came with a predictable and overall, bad storyline.. as well as a rhyme scheme that was too simple, along with no imagery and miniscule amounts of emotion. Rile1, on the other hand, had a decent storyline.. pretty good rhyme scheme, some imagery, and a pretty good amount of emotion. Overall, Rile1 just had the better overall verse, and that's why he gets my vote.

Vote - Rile1

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Voted For: Rile1

hmmm well Rile1's ending was just flat out forced but so was Showdown's... so I had to look deeper into each verse... and although Showdown's flows real well... his verse is just self praise... it was almost as if he suddenly remembered this was a topical battle when he was almost done writing his verse... Rile laid down alotta ground work than just rushed his ending... Probably because he was nearing the line limit... but he still covered the topic best... and in a topical that counts more than anything else...

Vote: Rile1