Very good imagery and "storytelling". I enjoyed this piece and the impact it had, the realization that the person had of themselves was off the chain. Keep it up, great work..9.9 outta 10.

Damn Got Fifteen Responses And Want More Now That's Just Straight Up Greedy Home Anyway It Was A Nice Post

thanks for the feed people u may now sleep......unless ur nice then post like crazy

Dope shyt..
You used nyce vocab, and the piece flowed well.
I liked the concept..

If anything, I think this line coulda been worded better:
to stop her everlasting excruciating sadness

I kinda foresaw the end comin out to be like that but still dope.. 8/10, stay up.

THANKS MAN appreciate it^^^still uppin fa sho

damn playa it was real good great keystyle...alot of emotion, creativity, strucutre on point, vocab on point, & evathang in between keep writing i like it

haha thanks man much appreciated dudde^^ still uppin for more feed

really short i was feelin it just if it was longer it woulda been more enjoyable, your flow was good, stucture was good, imagery was nice a lil bit random but mostly mine is random. theres nothin bad about that either, vocabulary was alright coulda been a lil bit more upped but overall i was feelin this. good job
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^^Thanks man really appreciate all the feeback......still uppin of course

Yo man this was off da chain in the emotional part man......so emotional had me thinkin u was gothic lol....anyways flow and vocab was on point man......Keep it commin....and keep elevatin....This had me imagine shit so keep doin ya thang and dont let no haters w/e haters that hatin get to ya

^^im feelin that fo real man feelin the love................still uppin and yo yung dolla get at me for a collab kid.......we gots to do one.....uppin

sick piece............