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I said Uppin mo fo'z!...............................

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tsk tsk tsk dis neva gonna get closed uppin fo da lazy ppl

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I'm Alive!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!

uppin please........................................

glad to see you back tweety i was startin to miss ya

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Voted For: Tweety

Tweety-Well..Ok.Was a bit too "shakespearish" to me.As in the other one....ur flow was awful.So many damn stretched lines.I didn't see one bar that flowed smooth.And ur transistion is awful as well.But the best thing you had going..was the content itself.The metas and adjectives were used good and shit.Made it more of a deep peice.Just work on flow and shit.

Mysteri-Ok...less "shakespearish" than tweety.So that was good.Flow and transition was a blow out in your favor.Cuz tweety's shit was plagued with stretched lines and weak transition..U still had some shit that didn't rhyme tho..like that 2nd to last bar.But the thing is..you had a lot of filler.Like one line talking about the person gettin outta bed n takin a bath..and wat I want to know is..how the fuck does that relate to the main topic?Keep all fillers out.

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