RapVerse.com Community - CriTiC vs .Lola Cruez. II

Voted For: CriTiC

Lola
Damn I see you have came along way as well, I just peeped a battle from given light and mentalz and well I havent voted for awhile.

anyway, I think your stucture has came and formed good, but your lines are still a little streched and dont flow properly, I'd also like to see you twist words more instead of goin for that straight story. you can still have a good story and even yet have that tight multiple now and then ya know. your imageyr is of course real good, but I just don't see much creativity in there, keep at it ma.

Critic
damn man its been a long ass time since I've read one of your pieces, I can't believe you still spittin topicals lmao.

Well let me get started. your flow is fa sho good well it was intril ya last verse there, you kinda got long and it felt like you rished it some what to get done. the emotion and stucture was very well done like Lola's. Your imagery was just as good I'd have to say, you kept on topic and yet you had more depth to your flow and what not, so basically I'm givin you my vote cause of your flow and creativity.

can y'all rtf here please: http://community.rapverse.com/showb...ad.php?t=206341

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