Voted For: Deranged

I'ma leave your skin all shot cuz in this....your skill's been outblocked
n that one and only in ur avatar stand for your only win you got
^^heh, ok
ur skills lighter than a cinderblock...is being whack ur main task?
i'll beat you in less than a sec.cuz really.. that's how long ur reign'd last
^^not too bad
there's no hope for you..ur dreams of bein dope is through..ur flopped flat
& your already passed last.....homie......isn't it best you stopped rap?
^^nah
RV's sick of you,I bet..you posting pics of u on the net with a wigga's hat
changed name from Law cuz when u spit..they all say "Thatnigga's whack!"*
^^okish
at home..you hoasting your mate..but here..your gettin roasted from hate
& the only thing nastier than you postin ur abs..is you posting ur face**
^^heh, ok

vs.

Yo Dont get mad when i master you,drop 2 clips when im blastin you
Have my goons chasin afta you, lyrically hard hittin when i tackle you
^^no, all threats, no diss
This cat should just throw in the towel cuz im lyrically superior
I'ma take it easy on dude cuz in every aspect he's literally inferior
^^diss, but worded too simply/unoriginal

I guess you could say i was destined to win this battle..it was meant 2 be
Itsa matchup like Nas and JaRule he not good enuff this ray charles could see
^^eh, okish, but not really direct
Dont come at me stupid kid, cuz theres no doubt my rhymes are colder
And when you step 2 me wrong i'll end up openin ya chest like a folder
^^simile, but those are still kinda noobish disses, ok

This little boy iz fukin worthless, gives off gay vibes like no otha
Caught him jackin off in tha corner when i got thru romancin his motha
^^no, sexual disses like that, are basically gay

well I can tell deranged took on a much less experienced opponent. No hate to ThatNigga, you just gotta use new and wittier concepts.

Deranged - also try including some wordplay to make your verse more witty

v/Deranged

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uppin for the win.................................

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Voted For: Deranged

not a great battle....
deranged's last two bars were good, that's what won this for him...
ThatNigga's rhymes were forced, and nothing hit very hard...
length was also forced, there were some unnecessary words that made most of ur bars stretched
biggest problem with deranged's verse is that in almost every bar he said something about TN bein wack...
still wins the battle tho.... v/deranged

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