wtf @ not RTF homie. thats bad craic

I liked this, the structure was nice, it wasn't overly crammed with attempts at being complex, it was simple and to the point. You hit the topic you had easily and the ending really made the whole poem that much more meaningful. You switched style a couple of times with your lines as JTR pointed out which if overly done ruins the poem, but you made it work and it added a bit more creativity to the look of your piece.

Overall a real nice drop. 8/10

GREAT JOB . one of the best so far
keep it up ............... nicce
GK

hey can you read mine it is called "have you ever"
thanx GK..................

poetry, i like a little ambiguity and thought provoking.....

meh, i havn't seen all your stuff, but i say don't be so precise and certain about what you are writing about....let the reader form multiple images and conclusions inside their head

something i noticed