thats the first rap ive ever written. I didnt sit down and right it either. I wrote it as i was typing. so it took me like 3 minutes.

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Just so we know im going by my first verse not the second.

Voted For: Big_O

yo yo yoimbatman-
You kept asking questions blah blah yea yea....Very very basicNot many punches just statements not much wordplay, you need alot more of flow.. I don't see any that even make sense.... overall it was kinda poor...........

Big_O-
Mmmm...The way you wrote it was like for audio...I dunno if you write it or not i dunno. The flow was alright...Now the wordplay with the flow of the sentence, didn't really make sense or didn't care too much for it. Overall you did ok against him.. nothin i would dig...

telling me that it was poor isnt helping me develop Its just knocking me down. Did you not read where i said it was my first time. Give me examples.

Voted For: yo yo yoimbatman

yo im givin this one to yo yo yoimbatman cuz he was more creative and had som iight wordplay and vocab...keep it up both of you and big_o you really need to elevate...hit me bak

Voted For: yo yo yoimbatman

elevation is in order right here for real. both of you had a poor and simple rhyme schemes.and your flows were both off key, especially Big who, to be frank, had a horrendous structure and flow.the punches were virtually non-existant and i dont think i saw more than one attempt at wordplay.
big o tried to use a personal but that was a poor attempt to say the least, but hey it was the only personal in the battle.

ima vote for yoyoyoimbatman just for the simple fact that he had a better structure and flow.

i cant comment on the punches cos they were equally lame.wordplay/metas/similies was non existant and i cant say anything about those aspects either

but based on the only two aspects that were apparent in this battle, ie structure and flow im gonna have to vote for batman

v/yo yo yoimbatman

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Voted For: yo yo yoimbatman

Big_O - WHACK, it flowed ok, but the punches were horible.

Best Line - NONE

Worst Line - ALL of Your Verse.

yo yo yoimbatman - Better then Big O, your had "ok" punches, and a iight flow.

Best Line - Cuz i spit poison Ill send you back where you came from.
No nigga will step to me I make the toughest gangsta run.

Worst Line - Bitch who do you think you are?
Do you really think you can hang wit Big Jay R?

OVERALL - This was a bad battle. Yo yo yo wins because he atleast tried punches.

Vote - Yo yo yo

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uppin fo my niggaz battle..........shya...hit me bak

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read my rhyme yo yo yoimbatman isnt my rap name. I registered this acount in school with like 50 kids behind me messing around i made it. My rap names "j r" My initials and im a junior so yea.

bicth there was 10 kids and a german teacher behind you!!!who tha fuck you tryna play?!!!...lol...j/k bout callin you a bitch...uppin fo this last vote fo my nigga yo yo yoimbatman

uppin 1 more votte come on guys!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!1

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