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Paranoid 10-16-05 02:08 AM

Voted For: Mentalz

Given Light
I liked your piece a lot, but I thought you were to basic, your rhyme scheme was not that great to me man, I usually see you drop hotter then that, you used to do crazy shit. Your stucture was alright, emotion was pretty good yea. imagery was like real basic to get more complex and write sayin how hard you'll kill a faker/hater trying to fuck wit ya, you know. anyway good job man.

Mentalz
I'm very fond of your style, I like it a lot man. You have came along way wit writin skills, I'd like to see you start doin audios sometime. Your flow is pretty good man, the vocab twists shit well and gives it that barrier wit the skills. the emotion and imagery are almost on lock on this. overall really killed this and I just really like yours cuz it sounded more of a audio to me.

can y'all rtf here: http://community.rapverse.com/showb...ad.php?t=206341

thanks y'all upps wit the battle

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atti? 10-17-05 02:56 PM

This was feedback posted for Mentalz
 
Nice Job Fams,

Way To Lay It Down For C.S.

Daubs 10-21-05 09:01 PM

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Mentalz 10-24-05 04:12 AM

Stop sleepin' on this CREW battle. This shit needs to get done with. Drop a vote and anything you have in your sig WILL get replied to with sincere feed.

Peace.

SINISTER 10-25-05 02:58 AM

Checkin Polls............................................. .

Daubs 10-25-05 06:30 AM

up................................................

Mentalz 10-30-05 11:41 AM

.............................. Stop Sleeping ................................


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