uppin!!!!!! c'mon, 50 views and hardly any replies!!??

*cough*...........

But when written breaks boundaries and builds bonds.
writing captures moments,so that one moment lives on.

I Neva Read Ah OM Like This Before Lol Dis Shit Was Aight Tho, Feelin Ya Concept & Da Examples U Gave...Serious

8/10

good! I try to be original lol! I'll RTF on w/e man, thanx 4 the feed...

like your sig........ ok........ great metas and voc......... nice, original concept........ not sure what was goin on with the structure, but it wasn't bad....... wow....... this iz a really good piece........ chip iz my boy, he knows what he's talkin about........ i'd give u an overall 9/10..... keep writing...........

Thanx V.much for the feed..

lots of peeps dont get structure on RV so lemme explain. I Study poetry and the use of structure is V.important in a piece. Short, quick lines are absolute, they give a sense of making a statement,like 'Diction is my addiction' I've tried to use alliteration, enjambment, short and long lines to create the effect that i want. I duno if i've succeeded lol but i tried. For evry1 on RV that thinks structure of poetry or OM's shuld be all the lines the same length, that is wrong.

SOMEBODY FINALLY GETS IT!!!!!!!!! B = my new favorite poet!

ooooh yeah! lol:D

wow.. this was beautiful :'(

You got that "way with words" thing.
I liked this alot. RTF on.. nah I'm playin.

good job. :thumbup:

lol thank uuuuuu deph! :love: any1 else? any1.........is this thing on? :(

guess not goddamit, if any1 looks in here plz leave feed cuz im desperately tryin to get better.

hey good piece fo sho.......

Spilt tears, mixed with ink,
create a cocktail of broken dreams;
or stories of purest love.
Language can be a barrier.
^^^^fav lines

u got some mad talent aint neva seen none of ur shit on here b4 but i sure would like to c some more of it...........1