|
show me where i recycled bitch???
Fuckig homo knew i shoulda put this i EFL |
Voted For: Withersman
ILLest this is the first I've ever read one of your text verses and I'd say you have potential at first. I think like most of your lines were spelt wierd and seemed forced kinda, I can't explain it but it just feels like it. your flow could use a bit of work and so could your punchlines you don't run up the personals much either try n twist words more man, play wit the definitions of words. Withers I liked your 6 lines a bit better they were a lil streched but the flow was there in a way. stucutre was cool but what I most noticed abbout yours was that you had better punchlines and creativty in your verse. the fact that you twisted shit more was dope you should went a bit longer though man. overall dope.. 1 |
This was feedback posted for Illist
ok good flow just work on ur structure a bti really easy win props just showing love
bump |
This was feedback posted for Withersman
yea?.............................................. ................
|
Voted For: Withersman
just checking poll... liked top secret line.......... |
Voted For: Illist
Withersman OK,too many threats in your verse.Like..I see the wordplay you did in the 1st bar,but you didn't put it in a way that dissed.Saying u'll hang him doesn't diss at all.And nearly ur whole verse was made of threats too.The girlfriend line was the only decent line you had,and that was becuz it actually dissed. Illist First off,I think you overused the 3 line method in your verse.But other than that,it was a pretty good verse.Esspeccially the 2nd bar wit the girl line..that punch hit hard.Only line I wasn't feelin was the last one.Cause it seemed to self glorify more than diss... Vote-Illist Drop an honest vote in the link below http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=212726 |
uppppppppppppppin this easy win for ilist props..
|
Voted For: Illist
Shit...2 me this was completly one sided cant deny or even hide it the flow belonged to Illist, his verbs vibed the realest... all his punchlines were sharper Withersman faded away like Ron Harper... almost seemed to be a no show couldnt pick out one better personal --------------------------------------------------------------- Illist best Lines: This fag bags lackin schemes, you the wackest cat i seen & 'liter ali' dipose 'em so bad.... .......You'd think I was throwin' away boxing magazines --------------------------------------------------- Withersman Best Lines: Manly Flow... Son... You're Whining With Your Banging Bitch Spits Take The Tie From My League Record & Fucking Hang You With It ----------------------------------- |
| All times are GMT -4. The time now is 05:38 AM. |