this was pretty decent.sylabell count is reckless in some areas and pretty hard to follow but in freeverse form it holds toghther well.your imagery is basically o.k it cound be much better if you used more profound words and metaphores within your already made picture.your vocab needs to be upgraded instead of saying late and create or sky and why try using more complex vocab it pulls the reader in more and makes your imagery shine better.i think this was still all in all a decent attempt here 6/10.
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LOVED IT , great job........rhymed verry well
amazin' that what i like.....
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