Im suprised Madd, you actually dropped feed. Why not do it regularly?

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RTF cunt nest..

give a link, and uppin

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From the start it was good, but towards the ending it gotten bad. I liked your imaginary very vividly portrait and detailed, but it seems to me that some of your lines seems force. The creativity of this was nice, kinda like a metaphor piece. The flow was choppy here and there, it's cool that you broke it up into sections, like me ;) Overall this was a nice drop just work on flow and try to point onto the piece once you start a verse. Pz.

thanks for the feed lola. uppin.

the piece had an abstract flow
had ill content and imagery was illy at the beginnin
the dividin in sections was coo

Equipped with firearms to destroy intruders, unable to be seen
Cloaking ability offered as a tribute to my life being swept clean
Armor implanted over my flesh, so battlewounds wont do damage
Nitrious Oxidide presented, fastly moving w/out crashing..ill manage
Peripheral Vision annointed site seeing will elevate my kill count
Predicting a world take over, body pile ups deserted in big mounts
^sick vocab, and nice content

thewhole piece kept my attention
i think u coulda threw a more complex rhyme scheme and still managed to get ur point across.....i no how it is to use an abstract flow...u can pack more concentration on content that way and u did it well, i think just a tad more rhyme scheme woulda helped the read go more fluidly, yet still hold the content

keep the pen writing

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thanks dawg, uppin.

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dope man..nice peice.

nice consept, very deep, dope...nicde topic, good imagrey...