already have man, good lookin'

This was feedback posted for Drakel
 

eaaaaaaaaaasy win better structure flow vocab imagery weerd u owned lol bummmmmmmmmmmmmmmp

Voted For: Drakel

Drakel claims he’s ~classic~ but even Michael Crichton would consider him ~Jurassic~
~Act quick~ cause I’ll do three ~back flips~ and execute a double black belt karate ~class kick~
THAT WAS FUNNY BUT ONLY CAUSE OF THE KARATE KICK
My bars may stretch long like ~blacks dicks~ but ~fact is~….
Your skill…I’m lyrically “passed-it” like Steve ~Nash assists~
DECENT BAR

I couldn't really breakdown the rest cause it rhymed but i had trouble seperating it. it was good but the multies were distracting in this case.hurt the verse. punches weren't hard hitting but that verse was damn funny especially executing the karate kick...lmao


got your eyes on the prize? ahh, shit, must've blinked
cause rye's getting smashed here, without a single drink
DECENT PUNCH
your sun aint rising, its setting....your day is through
keep all your ass lines, and you deserve this moon
GOOD PUNCH
i hate that stupid avy, all you faggot newbs think its awesome
just look at that record...(ahhh)....20 fucking losses
RATHER WEAK
im just collossus, i know i intimmidate this whore
shit, he has more sweat on his psalms, than liars in court
GOOD WORDPLAY, PUNCH NOT SO HARD
leave him speechless, i rip him to pieces, leave'em faceless
the bitch is at a loss for more words, that missin dictionary pages
THAT SEEMS A LIL PLAYED
this day, breaks him easily, but no morning when he's done
cause it finally dawned upon him, he just got sunned
GOOD PUNCH

v/ drakel

It was too hard to find the flo of the other one and the multies were a lil overboard

Rtf on my gkilla battle

hey, this is still open -_-

Voted For: Drakel

Ohhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh at that last line. Shit was nasty as fuck. NO LIE! You could wrote just that.... And fuckin' killed in this battle.

P.S.-Rising Sun, your structure makes me want to puke.

yeah man, that opener was dope eh

Voted For: Drakel

nie battle. rising came a bit too weak. he had multies, but all those decorations make your verse seem real newbish. you also focused on multies but no punches while drakel actually dropped some funny and illy punches. good job drakel.........