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Voted For: Mentalz

nice job to both, mentalz took this, he had vocab on point and his descritption of the topic was way more in depth than Oz's. It gave more of an interesting story and kept me hooked to it while i just read Oz's Cause I Had To.....

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Voted For: Oz.

A YO DAT SHYT WAS TIGHT ASS HELL WAY BETTA FLOW AND STRUCTURE VOTE// OZ

Voted For: Mentalz

Now this was a dope battle... illness from both... but only one can win right... with taht being said... OZ's piece was fire, had a nice flow to it with a real bleek demeanor I fucked with it fairly heavily... but Mentalz piece really put out the flames...

Opener: Oz
Closer: Mentalz
Structure: Mentalz
Flow: Mentalz
Imagery: Mentalz (Oz just by the nature of it couldn't really paint a picture... though I really do like cerebral type pieces)
Concept: Mentalz

Vote: Mentalz

You can keep that vote Oz. Hope you enjoyed it....

Voted For: Mentalz

mentaz u won this eazy u beat oz in every catagory
u both can use some more help but a like that u r try so keep it up

mentaz u flowed better and better lines oz u had the oppisite

Voted For: Mentalz

my vote goes to Mentalz.Yall both had some good pieces but I felt that Mentalz approched the topic better.Lets see Mentalz as I start reading your piece it had a real good opener which really opened my eyes to read your piece.And as I read down your piece you came good with your Imagry and emotion in this piece.Your Imagry was good cuz when I read the piece I could picture what was going on in your piece.And the emotion was real strong in this piece cuz I could really feel it when I was reading it.Also you had a good structure and good use of your vocabulary too.And also you were real creative with the topic.Oz your piece was good too.As I read down Oz piece he had a good opener also that opened my eyes to read your piece.You had good Imagry and emotion too but I thnk you could have went deeper with the emotion in this piece.But the Imagry was good cuz I could also picture what was going on in your piece too.Oz also had a good structure and good use of his vocabulary.And also he was real creative with the topic.But after reading both pieces in this battle Mentalz gets my vote.


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