Voted For: Young Money

o/k to be honest neither is great, infact both need a fair bit of work

but

imma give this to young- had slightly beta punches, both had decnt enough flow although some of five stars stuff didnt rhyme, example last bar - carry and mary don't rhyme

anyway young gets this

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This was feedback posted for Young Money
 

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uppin carry n mary do ryhme folks u mus gotta accent or sumthin

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Voted For: Young Money

Seen as how your online, you can RTF In my battle with *Antic* :)

Fivestar:

too much man, you could of removed ALOT Of uneccessary rhymes from yur verse.

I kill niggaz wit da flow, barz wit em hard like bullets/
If he gota revolver it mus gotta " push" sign on it cuz he wont "pull" it**/
^
that was aight, Nice creativity, could of used it a litle more effecitevly tho.

So don test me chump, give u a rumble if u wanna fight/
this a verbal shoot-out, an it lookin like u brought a butterknife/
^
thats one of your better bars too...

You a jabber-jaw an itz startin 2 offend me/
U stay tellin tall tales about banging hammers like john henry/
^
LOL

Ifthe rest of your verse would of been like those bars there, you would of ripped this dude, for real.



Money:
str8 aim at ya homo PRIDE-TRICK when it's 'ludacris magic to find his gender' Like "HIDE-BITCH"//
^
that was aight, I'm feelin that...

besides that bar, nothin much else to quote

I'll brake it down:
personals (non really, but I guess Money had that ''Karen'' bar, so I'll go with him on that)
Multies = Money
Punches = Fivestar
Flow = Money

the mettas wernt strog here either

for more consistancy and fluency in his verse, Money gets my vote

RTF Money.

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Voted For: FIVESTAR GENERAL

Parlae to me sucks ass for real. his multis are retarted and are just there cuz he thinks they sound good. Iv'e seen how multis can turn a battle around and ur shit was a cheap counterfeit on the real. next time, make sure that shit made sence dawg. 5star....so ur a pussy ass sailor? look into the history of a 5 star general. Im voting for you cuz your verse made more sence but it really needs work as far as structure, flow and punchlines. keep elivating ya'll

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