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my bad man....ill take time for ya okay???

Tony -
first 8 bars: come in loud....could be put down a few....pronunciation on official...could be better, but i understand you had to make the syllables fit....i like the breathing pattern....you work it well with it....i think i like the syckle cell line but i cant understand the last word....nice multi's tho....some metaphors that are pretty nice...voice works...i doubt you are (no offense) but you do sound gangsta so it sounds hella nice on the retro beat...

Enygma - higher voice...still lil lound....damn i like the voice levels....its nice the contrast between you too, keeps you into the track, waiting to her the other person again....niceeeeeeeeeeeeeee lyrics on these 8 bars...good play off tony, and the dog line, original and nice....a lil more breath work and you got it down good...(i can hear you breath a lil too much)

tony again - the volume dropped dramatically.....this is where you want the level at....maybe a lil higher....like .2dbs or so....nice switch on rhyme sceame....it seems to blend good....lyrics nice if you listen closely...but you emphasised things too little....and the i suggest you leave leave.....ehh, you know you coulda done better with that last line...or at least dilivered it a lil better....

last of the 4x4 enygma - good scheme....an middle of the verse switch up....interesting.....umm not ya best. but has the best line of the song...."take it to the heart like a shit on ya cheast" that had me laugh...its good to get reactions like that, something anyone can pick up....buttttttttt you blew it at the end....at the point where i start to pick you back up after the laughter...the end just seemed like you were thinking of stuff for fillers...not feeling the end

the talking during the sample needs to be lower....make it seem like backround to the sample....cuz in the foreground just sounds kinda lame....

second verse -
tony - not on you but i think yall shoulda switched up order for the second verse....ohh well, just a personal opinion....okay to the verse....first four lines are nice....the rest is ehh....from hearing the rest of the song....it seems like you didnt put the effort into those and it shows...the white mouse man thing....nuh uh...its not that good a lyric, and if you gon keep it....work on the pronuncation it didnt seem to fit....you fell off a lil here

enygma - i mean good lyrics...they are real nice is you pay attention....but hence is where my critisim is....it gets hard to pay attention...cuz almost everything was a multi....you didnt take many breaks for it to hit the listener making it kinda boring....you too fell off here

as i said before real nice track guys but the end you did fall off a bit....i know it could be better from just hearing the first verse...i mean dont take this to heart as negative tho...cuz i mean you guys got some ways to go im tryin to help you get there, but im not sayin im there, cuz i got some ways to go to get where you are....good track tho...but comon, we all know it could be better....

8/10....

if you get bored....try to revive the battle section with some votes thanks, if not....keep putting together shit this quality or better...i dont want to see yall degress any....