Your rhyming wasnt exact but still was a multi which gave this piece a unique flow. the short lines worked well with the flow also, was VERY poetical and had imagery and good vocab

The heart broken brush cried
a scared spectrum's dyeing shards
of love as I wiped his marred eyes
against a stretch of page to create fine art.

^they were the best imo but overall a solid piece mate. Good work.

Thanks alot for the feedback man

Nice show of emotion as usuall fams, has a poetic vibe though, like most your OM work of late does. Keep it up. I'll hit up that collabo this weekend.

Peace.

Thanks for the feedback

*s.v. picks his jaw up from the floor.*

dopicus brutha........purely dopicus.
i think that this is probably one of the dopest pieces i've seen you do.......and trust me, you've dropped some ridiculous fire in this open mic forum before. personally, i have no complaints with this piece. like i've said before: "...who can write rhymes precise and passionate just like atticus...". beautiful work fam, word. you truly are a crhmye sin/rapverse iconoclast.

LETS SHOW 'EM HOW WE DO!!! BOOST THE MUTHAFUCKIN' CRHYME RATE!!!


...supervillain almighty, big bad crhyme sin...

Lol thanks for the love Sv