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Voted For: iLFS

Damn Rev why you got me killin Paramik again,
Bout to get locked up for beating on gay men,
No wack attemp of a punch 2/10
My punches pimp this dude, he's my manwhore,
When he's makin me my money is the only he rolls on the floor,*
Ight nice personal 7/10
But enough with the gay jokes, shit is makin me vomit,
So I'ma take you thru the steps of Basic Paranomiks,
Lol I found it funy 7/10
First off you gotta battle some herbs and noobs,
For example look at Boomer he tried to rhyme terds and boobs,**
Lol nice personal 7/10
Step 2 in the process of the B.P. is to be free constantly,
This dude is so open it's like his asshole is screaming 'FUCK ME!',
Lol nice lol haha 8/10
Damn another fag joke but I can't help it I got solid proof,
This thread makes me think he wants to collab with Q in the booth,***
Lol nice wordplay 8/10
So where was I at, Step 3, and that's simply to think you're cool,
A loner, came on RV to try get all his Net buddies to get drunk afterschool,****
Lol nice personal lol wack wordplay 7/10
Step 4 is to be non creative but ask other to do your shit,
A Retard Story, I got a name, "The Life Of Papa Paramik',*****
Nice lol 7/10
Anything you throw at me, I'll disreard, so this step is the last,
Simply put your career is like Gym Class, you can't help but pass,
Lol nice closer 8/10

Overal: 62/90

vs.

You can bite and have your D/R’s, but I am still taking the win bitch.
Be on the ground with a temper tantrum….
…………………………………………†¦â€¦â€¦and still not under-stand my shit.
Eh ight 6/10
You a fake everybody knows that, like Omish people save ya energy.
I’d like to be thought of an asshole so I can better shit out ya delivery.
No 5/10
See, he aint worth it, think you strong? stop with your beat jokes.
I’ll paddle the canoe to greatness, while you die of a heat stroke.
Eh 6/10
Don’t think your important man, cause really, your nothing special.
But I think I can help your flow out, by bursting your blood vessel.
Ight 7/10
You love to dickride me man, but don’t mean go fight for the seater.
If you aint gonna measure up to me, then you probably be me, turd. (metered)
Its ight 7/10
Your really mental, so I think that you should rearrange the brain.
But I don’t need to be out in the meadow to see ya brain is plain.
Eh corny 6/10
Much of a joke, you aint gon survive RVS, near to cracking me up.
And If you hungry for fame don’t bite me……
………………………………………….. …. or I’ll resort to stabbin’ these fucks.
Ight 7/10
Now your just pissing me off, this’ll end in a fucked up nasty scene.
And sure go and recycle ya spit, But I don’t mean drink your urine!
Eh ok 6/10
You can leave me blind, but I don’t need to see that you finished.
Because if you pop eyes, I’ll punch your gut and take your spinach.
Gay 2/10
This match is over L, and I’m saying the words like “Bye" and “See Ya!�
Cause if it’s quality not quantity, fuck then your shit must be diarehea.
eh 5/10

Overal: 57/100

Clearly lfs had the betrer verse

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Voted For: Papa Paramik

You can bite and have your D/R’s, but I am still taking the win bitch.
Be on the ground with a temper tantrum….
…………………………………………†¦â€¦â€¦and still not under-stand my shit.
ummmmm.....no....the werd play didnt werk
You a fake everybody knows that, like Omish people save ya energy.
I’d like to be thought of an asshole so I can better shit out ya delivery.
.....that was ok.............
See, he aint worth it, think you strong? stop with your beat jokes.
I’ll paddle the canoe to greatness, while you die of a heat stroke.
.....it rhymed....but thats it....lol
Don’t think your important man, cause really, your nothing special.
But I think I can help your flow out, by bursting your blood vessel.
..............ok............
You love to dickride me man, but don’t mean go fight for the seater.
If you aint gonna measure up to me, then you probably be me, turd. (metered)
....good werd play....but the punch suck....its a contradiction...........
Your really mental, so I think that you should rearrange the brain.
But I don’t need to be out in the meadow to see ya brain is plain.
.......boooo....that was wack...
Much of a joke, you aint gon survive RVS, near to cracking me up.
And If you hungry for fame don’t bite me……
………………………………………….. …. or I’ll resort to stabbin’ these fucks.
........ummmmm....no another waste of space...
Now your just pissing me off, this’ll end in a fucked up nasty scene.
And sure go and recycle ya spit, But I don’t mean drink your urine!
.....ummmm...........no......terrible
You can leave me blind, but I don’t need to see that you finished.
Because if you pop eyes, I’ll punch your gut and take your spinach.
ewwwww.......no........
This match is over L, and I’m saying the words like “Bye" and “See Ya!�
Cause if it’s quality not quantity, fuck then your shit must be diarehea.
....lol....wouldnt diareha be the quantity....

paramik......5/10






Damn Rev why you got me killin Paramik again,
Bout to get locked up for beating on gay men,
ummmmmm....aiight i guesss
My punches pimp this dude, he's my manwhore,
When he's makin me my money is the only he rolls on the floor,*
......I dont git it......made no sense?
But enough with the gay jokes, shit is makin me vomit,
So I'ma take you thru the steps of Basic Paranomiks,
ummmmm.....filler
First off you gotta battle some herbs and noobs,
For example look at Boomer he tried to rhyme terds and boobs,**
........that wasnt even a punch or anything?.....
Step 2 in the process of the B.P. is to be free constantly,
This dude is so open it's like his asshole is screaming 'FUCK ME!',
ummmm....i guess....ok...should be werded better
Damn another fag joke but I can't help it I got solid proof,
This thread makes me think he wants to collab with Q in the booth,***
.......wack punch.....git off the gay shit......
So where was I at, Step 3, and that's simply to think you're cool,
A loner, came on RV to try get all his Net buddies to get drunk afterschool,****
........another wack line..........
Step 4 is to be non creative but ask other to do your shit,
A Retard Story, I got a name, "The Life Of Papa Paramik',*****
........barely ok........
Anything you throw at me, I'll disreard, so this step is the last,
Simply put your career is like Gym Class, you can't help but pass,
.......booooo @ the closer...........

Ilfs........3/10



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Voted For: Papa Paramik

Don’t think your important man, cause really, your nothing special.
But I think I can help your flow out, by bursting your blood vessel.
You can leave me blind, but I don’t need to see that you finished.
Because if you pop eyes, I’ll punch your gut and take your spinach.
This match is over L, and I’m saying the words like “Bye" and “See Ya!�
Cause if it’s quality not quantity, fuck then your shit must be diarehea.

VS

First off you gotta battle some herbs and noobs,
For example look at Boomer he tried to rhyme terds and boobs,**
Step 4 is to be non creative but ask other to do your shit,
A Retard Story, I got a name, "The Life Of Papa Paramik'

I got para taking it just, and elefes didnt go 20, follio :love:

Hey. Daubs can't vote. Shame on you. Go to your room, no dinner tonight. lol

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